HelenHan
Movie Diary 001:The Shawshank Redemption Because of Inception, this movie became the third of the greatest movies in the history, and just behind The Shawshank Redemption and The Godfather. When I looked at the top 100 list of the greatest movies, suddenlly I had interest in movies again though I didn't watch movies so continual as before these years. Maybe i'd better to watch movies as usual, maybe i can finish a movie every night even if i'm too busy. We are human beings just becaust we have spirit. We can touch the beauty, the freedom, the emotion and so on , with our heart. I want these sensations back. So, first night, I watched The Shawshank Redemption as a beginning. There're too many reasons to make it become a greatest movie. Even you can't explain it clearly, but you can feel it, touch it. Then I remembered I've read this novel written by Stephen King, it just like a modern edition of The Count of Monte Cristo, a similar story about vengeance and forgiveness. People said too many words about this movie, so I don't want to say andthing more(if i really can). I just want to say: go to watch it, then be a person with hope through your life.
Oct 13, 2010 3:32 PM
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Movie Diary 001:The Shawshank Redemption

Because of Inception, this movie became the third <strike>of the</strike><strike> </strike>greatest movie in<strike> </strike><strike>the</strike> history, <strike>and</strike> just behind The Shawshank Redemption and The Godfather.

When I looked at the top 100 list of the greatest movies, suddenlly I had interest in movies again though I didn't watch movies so continual as before these years.
 -->The sentence would sound better if you said " When I saw the list of the top 100 greatest movies, suddenly I became interested in movies again even though I hadn't watched movies continually beforehand."

Maybe i'd better to watch movies as usual, maybe i can finish a movie every night even if i'm too busy.
--> correction: "Maybe it'd be better to watch movies more often, then perhaps I could finish a movie every night...even if i'm too busy."  ....."as usual" feels awkward in this sentence and so "often" would be a better word to use, and the second use of the word "maybe" is repetitive so the sentence could flow better :]

We are human beings <strike>just</strike> <strike>becaust</strike> because we have spirit. We can touch the beauty, the freedom, the emotion and so on , with our heart. I want these sensations back.

So, the first night, I watched The Shawshank Redemption <strike>as</strike> from the <strike>a</strike> beginning.

There're too many reasons to make it become a greatest movie. Even you can't explain it clearly, but you can feel it, touch it. Then I remembered I've read this novel written by Stephen King, it just like a modern edition of The Count of Monte Cristo, a similar story about vengeance and forgiveness. People said too many words about this movie, so I don't want to say andthing more(if i really can).
-->correction: "There are too many reasons to have it be one of the greatest movies.  You can't really explain it, but you can feel it, touch it.  Then I remembered reading a novel written by Stephen King, it was just like a modern edition of The Count of Monte Cristo, a similar story about vengeance and forgiveness.  People have said too many things about this movie, so I don't want to say anything more (if i really can).

I just want to say: go <strike>to</strike> watch it, then be a person with hope through your life.


If you have any questions on any of the corrections I made feel free to message me and I can explain it to you! :] oh and by the way, I love "The Shawshank Redemption"...it is one of my favorite movies! :]

October 14, 2010
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