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Written Exercise 39 -Beautiful sunset Last late afternoon, I took a bike ride and by chance I saw a beautiful sunset. I took some pictures of the sunset which I have attached. Please take a look at the following pictures. The sun was falling little by little. Finally, it's gone. We can see that the sun in the pictures from 1 to 5 are full, round and egg-yolk like. It really looks like an egg. Its sunlight reflected on the river, which made the scene more beautiful. Suppose that I had started to take a bike earlier, I would have seen the sunset more. What a beautiful sunset! Wasn't it? The last one is a chart which recorded my bike ride route. The chart contained 7 parts of information. It shows that the distance of my bike ride route was 14.10KM, the average speed was 9.9KM/H, the duration was an hour 25mins and 26 seconds, the saving carbon emission was 1795.89g, the highest elevation was 29, calorie consumption was 331.2, the maximum speed was 28.58 KM/H. From analysing the record data, you may think I rode too slowly, right? Well, kind of yes. That's because I went and bought some food in a market in the meantime. I normally ride 18 -20 KM/H.
Feb 16, 2021 8:10 AM
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Written Exercise 39 -Beautiful sunset Late yesterday afternoon, I took a bike ride and by chance I saw a beautiful sunset. I took some pictures of the sunset which I have attached. Please take a look at the following pictures. The sun was setting little by little. Finally, it was gone. We can see that the sun in the pictures from 1 to 5 are full, round and egg-yolk like. It really looks like an egg. Its light reflected on the river, which made the scene more beautiful. I suppose that if I had started to ride earlier, I would have seen more of the sunset. What a beautiful sunset! Wasn't it? The last image is a chart of my bike ride route. The chart contains 7 parts of information. It shows the distance of my bike route was 14.10KM, the average speed was 9.9KM/H, the duration was an hour, 25mins and 26 seconds, the carbon savings was 1795.89g, the highest elevation was 29, calorie consumption was 331.2, the maximum speed was 28.58 KM/H. From analysing the data, you may think I rode slowly, right? Well, kind of yes. That's because I went and bought some food in a market on the way. I normally ride 18 -20 KM/H.
February 16, 2021
Written Exercise 39 -Beautiful sunset (Yesterday late in the) afternoon, I took a bike ride and by chance I saw a beautiful sunset. I took some pictures of the sunset(,) which I have attached. Please take a look at the following pictures. The sun was falling little by little. Finally, it (was) gone. (You) can see that the sun in pictures 1 to 5 are full, round and egg-yolk like. It really looks like an egg (to me). Its (or “The”) sunlight reflected on the river, which made the scene (even) more beautiful. (I) suppose that (if) I had started (my) bike (ride) earlier, I would have seen (more of) the sunset. (or... “I would have been able to enjoy more of the sunset.”) What a beautiful sunset, wasn't it? The last one is a chart which recorded my bike ride route. The chart contained 7 (pieces) of information. It shows that the distance of my bike ride route was 14.10(km - no need for capitalization), the average speed was 9.9(km/h), the duration was an hour 25 (minutes - if you don’t abbreviate ‘an hour’, then don’t abbreviate the rest) and 26 seconds, the saving carbon emission was 1795.89g, the highest elevation was 29 (meters? / feet?), calorie consumption was 331.2, (and) the maximum speed was 28.58 (km/h). From (analyzing - how we spell it in Canada anyway) the record data, you may think I rode too slowly, right? Well, (that is somewhat true). That's because I (stopped) and bought some food in a market (during my ride). I normally ride 18-20(km/h). Corrected by Rob
Thanks Rob!
February 16, 2021
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