Quynh
I live in countryside. There are many trees, plants and bushes around my house. I usually see wild animals such as geckoes, worms, butterflies, birds, squirrels, even snakes. Just like the majority of people, I'm afraid of snakes. They will startle me if I suddenly see them. I'm scared of being bitten although I have never bitten until now. Sometimes, I see a snake on a branch in my garden. Its body make me feel hair-raising but beside that I'm also curious about the animal without legs and stare at it. Look how it crawl, so flexible and brisk! At the other times, I also see them on the line of hanging clothes and on the window bars in toilet at times. However, I realized that when they find out my appearance (I think not only mine, but also everyone) they always run away at first. They are not active to attrack. Maybe, the kind of snakes at my place is gentle. Anyway the snake is still the creature that I daren't to play with.
Oct 9, 2021 2:26 PM
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I live in the countryside. There are many trees, plants, and bushes around my house. I usually see wild animals such as geckoes, worms, butterflies, birds, squirrels, and even snakes. Just like the majority of people, I'm afraid of snakes. They will startle me if I see them. I'm scared of being bitten, although I've never bitten until now. Sometimes, I see a snake on a branch in my garden. Its body makes my hair stand on end, but I'm also curious about the animal without legs and will stare at it. Look how it slithers, so flexible and quick! At other times, I also see them on the line of hanging clothes and the window bars in the toilet. However, I realized that when they sense my presence (I think not only of my presence but of all humans), they always run away at first. They aren't actively trying to attack humans. Maybe the snakes at my place are gentle. Anyway, the snake is still the creature I don't dare play with. (I hope this helped. 'Daren't' is a legit contraction as you know, but it's not commonly used so I changed it up a bit. Good job!)
October 10, 2021
K. Trevino made some good changes. I have a few additional comments. ¨I´ve never been bitten until now¨ makes me think that you were just now bitten! To avoid that possible confusion, it´s better to simply say, ¨I've never been bitten." (In English the phrase “until now” is used to refer to a change of circumstances where the change happens now. This explanation comes from https://blog.harwardcommunications.com/2010/11/18/until-now/) You could perhaps say: "At other times, I also see them on the clothesline or on the window bars of the bathroom." Did you want to say that the snakes go in the water of the toilet sometimes? If so, you could say ¨... on the window bars, and even in the toilet at times." (or "even in the toilet occasionally"). Since snakes can't "run", it doesn't seem quite right to say that a snake "runs away." So, I would probably say, "...when they sense my presence...they always slither away quickly." ~~~~~ I agree with you that snakes are fascinating. But I am happy to just see them occasionally in nature. I would feel a little nervous if snakes were frequent visitors in my yard or home!
October 10, 2021