Yelani Damsahani
These 👇objects were made by my sister herself. She is very interested in hand works. These are my sister’s 2 hours dedication. 🙂These are very beautiful. Is it?
Oct 2, 2020 1:00 PM
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These 👇objects were made by my sister herself. She is very interested in hand works. These are my sister’s 2 hours dedication. 🙂These are very beautiful. Is it?
These 👇 objects were made by my sister herself (1). She is very interested in crafts (2). These are the result of my sister’s 2 hours of dedication (3). 🙂 They (4) are very beautiful, aren’t they? (5) Comments: * (1) you could say “herself” there but since you’ve already pointed out that they’re made by your sister the “herself” isn’t really necessary. 😊 * (2) “crafts” is a word used to describe hand-made hobby projects, which this seems to be! If it’s more general, “working with her hands” might work. * (3) Just a correction that I felt flowed better, but there are several ways of writing this sentence. * (3) “These” established the objects you were talking about in the first sentence. Now there’s an understanding of that object(s) are being referring to, thus the more introduction-like “these” can be comfortably switched to “they” to mark that. This is pretty much semantics, but hey! * (5) congruence! I hope this doesn’t feel like too much. Your text was very easily understandable so you did really well. This is why I went for the little things, and I like sharing my thought process on corrections since it allows you to think it over for yourself instead of just accepting what I write. 👍🏻
October 2, 2020
These 👇objects were made by my sister herself. She is very interested in handmade objects. These are my sister’s 2 hours worth of dedication. 🙂These are very beautiful. Aren’t they?
October 2, 2020
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Yelani Damsahani
Language Skills
English, Hindi, Sinhala
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English, Hindi