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안녕하세요. 제의 단락을 확인하세요. 미리 감사으립니다. 제가 어렸때, 인도에서 인터넺 인기가 많아지 않았어요. 제집에 해늗번호는 없었어요. 그시간, 우리 식장에서 가어 물건에 샀어요. 한일, 제가 아빠까지 사자는 사를 질문했어요 왜냐하면 저 사자 동물원에서 봤어요. 그런데 제 아빠는 사자가 사지 않았어요. ㅋㅋ. 사자는 위험어요. 이 야기가 재미있어요. 지금도 저는 항상 많이 문건을 사고 싶어요 그런데 저는 식장에 가는 안좋아해요. 그래서 인터넷스핑은 베스트예요. 제가 언니는 제 생일에 항상 인터넷에서 믄언을 샀어고 마음에서 감사해요. 전, 사람들이 모든물건 such as 옺, 화장, Electronics, 책 etc 샀어요. 그런데 요즘 사람들이 basic 물건도 like 과일, 달걀, 과자와 vegetables 인터넷에서 주문해요. 보통, 안 세낮 택배를 받어요. Hello. Please check my paragraph. Thank you in advance. When I was young, the Internet was not popular in India. There was no mobile phone at my house. At that time, we used to go to the market to buy stuff. One day, I asked my father to buy a lion for me because I saw a lion at the zoo, but my dad didn't buy the lion. Lol. Lions are dangerous. The story is fun. Even now, I always want to buy a lot of things, but I don't like to go to the market, that's why Internet shopping is the best. I'm thankful that my sister always bought something on the internet on my birthday. Earlier, people used to buy everything such as clothes, electronics, books etc. But these days, people also order things like fruits, eggs, snacks, and vegetables such things online. Usually, people get their package in 3 days.
Jun 8, 2021 7:25 AM
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안녕하세요. 제 문장을을 확인해주세요. 미리 감사드립니다. 제가 어렸때, 인도에서 인터넷이 인기가 많아지 않았어요. 집에 핸드폰은 없었어요. 그 당시, 저희는 마켓에 가서 물건에 샀었어요. 어느날, 제가 아빠에게 사달라고 물어봤어요, 제가 사자 동물원에서 봤기 때문이죠. 그런데 제 아빠는 사자를 사지 않았어요. ㅋㅋ. 사자는 위험해요. 웃긴이야기죠. 지금도 저는 항상 많이 물건들을 사고 싶어요 그런데 저는 마켓에 가는걸 안좋아해요. 그래서 인터넷쇼핑이 베스트예요. 제 언니가 제 생일에 항상 인터넷에서 선물을 사줘서 정말 고마워요. 옛날엔 사람들이 옷, 화장품, 전자기기, 책 등등을 샀지만, 요즘은 사람들이 식료품같은 과일, 달걀, 과자와 야채등등을 인터넷에서 주문해요. 평균적으로 3일정도안에 택배를 받아요. Hello. Please check my paragraph. Thank you in advance. When I was young, the Internet was not popular in India. There was no mobile phone at my house. At that time, we used to go to the market to buy stuff. One day, I asked my father to buy a lion for me because I saw a lion at the zoo, but my dad didn't buy the lion. Lol. Lions are dangerous. The story is fun. Even now, I always want to buy a lot of things, but I don't like to go to the market, that's why Internet shopping is the best. I'm thankful that my sister always bought something on the internet on my birthday. Earlier, people used to buy everything such as clothes, electronics, books etc. But these days, people also order things like fruits, eggs, snacks, and vegetables such things online. Usually, people get their package in 3 days.
I really do appreciate your efforts to write a paragraph in Korean, but I would like you to suggest working on writing simple sentences first. Many of sentences were pretty rough to understand right now sadly. But, keep it up ! you are doing great!
June 8, 2021
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