These ðobjects were made by my sister herself. She is very interested in hand works. These are my sisterâs 2 hours dedication. ðThese are very beautiful. Is it?
These ðobjects were made by my sister herself. She is very interested in hand
works. These are my sisterâs 2 hours dedication. ðThese are very beautiful. Is
it?
These ð objects were made by my sister herself (1). She is very interested in crafts (2). These are the result of my sisterâs 2 hours of dedication (3). ð They (4) are very beautiful, arenât they? (5)
Comments:
* (1) you could say âherselfâ there but since youâve already pointed out that theyâre made by your sister the âherselfâ isnât really necessary. ð
* (2) âcraftsâ is a word used to describe hand-made hobby projects, which this seems to be! If itâs more general, âworking with her handsâ might work.
* (3) Just a correction that I felt flowed better, but there are several ways of writing this sentence.
* (3) âTheseâ established the objects you were talking about in the first sentence. Now thereâs an understanding of that object(s) are being referring to, thus the more introduction-like âtheseâ can be comfortably switched to âtheyâ to mark that. This is pretty much semantics, but hey!
* (5) congruence!
I hope this doesnât feel like too much. Your text was very easily understandable so you did really well. This is why I went for the little things, and I like sharing my thought process on corrections since it allows you to think it over for yourself instead of just accepting what I write. ððŧ
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These ðobjects were made by my sister herself. She is very interested in handmade objects. These are my sisterâs 2 hours worth of dedication. ðThese are very beautiful. Arenât they?