Farhana Qureishi
Is it grammatically correct and natural enough? ◆ He looked at me with furious anger like I've robbed him of the ideal chance of sick pleasure.
7 ม.ค. 2023 เวลา 22:35
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I think it should be ‘had robbed him’ as it is in the past. Maybe ‘for’ sick pleasure.
8 มกราคม 2023
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I would say that generally "with furious anger" would be considered redundant; it would be more typical to just say "furiously." To make your verb tenses match, you could either pair "He looks at me..." with "I've robbed" if you're speaking in the present or "He looked at me" with "I had robbed" if you intend it to be in the past. There are a couple of more subtle issues if you want it to read like an edited book, but those are the two that I think are the most significant.
8 มกราคม 2023
"Ideal" is positive, while "sick" is a negative adjective. The reader's mind doesn't go smoothly through the sentence. It might help to express why it's his ideal chance - his only opportunity, or his craving for revenge, for example. Is it clear in context whether you actually robbed him, or did he just look like you did? You might consider "He looked at me in fury as he realized I had robbed him of any chance for his sick pleasure."
8 มกราคม 2023
It should be: like I had robbed him… I would add: like I had just robbed him
7 มกราคม 2023
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