Could someone correct my writing? Many thanks How are you keeping? What's the weather like? It's cold outside but thanks goodness, it isn't snowing. I hope you're in excellent health and in good spi

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Could someone correct my writing? Many thanks How are you keeping? What's the weather like? It's cold outside but thanks goodness, it isn't snowing. I hope you're in excellent health and in good spirits. Unfortunately, I' ve been suffering from insomnia recently. I sleep very few hours. For example, yesterday I went to bed at 11 pm but till three am I couldn't fall asleep. I simply was lying flat staring at the ceiling. I woke up naturally at 6 am. I tried to fall asleep but to no effect. I did household chores, had an invigorating bath, then dried my hair. After drying my hair I went to my sister. On my way back home when I was in the zebra crossing I was almost run by a speeding car. I managed in time to get out the way. Unfortunately. so many drivers break driving laws. I came home and I am going to try to get some sleep. I am feeling very tired. I drink some sedative herbs but I think I must take some serious medication to overcome insomnia. That's all my news. Stay warm and keep in touch.

22 พ.ย. 2014 เวลา 12:36

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Could someone correct my writing? Many thanks.

How are you doing keeping? What's the weather like? It's cold outside but thanks goodness, it isn't snowing.

I hope you're in excellent health and in good spirits. Unfortunately, I've been suffering from insomnia recently. I sleep very few hours.

For example, yesterday I went to bed at 11 pm but I couldn't fall asleep untill three am. I simply was lying flat staring at the ceiling. I woke up naturally at 6 am. I tried to fall asleep but to no effect.

I did household chores, had an invigorating bath, then dried my hair. After drying my hair I went to my sister. On my way back home when I was in the zebra crossing I was almost run over by a speeding car.I managed to get out the way in time. Unfortunately. so many drivers break driving laws.

I came home and I am going to try to get some sleep. I am feeling very tired. I drank some sedative herbs but I think I must may have to take some serious medication to overcome insomnia.

That's all my news.

Stay warm and keep in touch.

Tips:

Your sentence structure is very good.

Separate your paragraphs into logical units of three sentences. You can have more than three if you need to complete a unique and related idea but try to keep the paragraph to three if possible.

Score: A-

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22 พฤศจิกายน 2014

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How are you keeping? Although "How are you doing?" is universal in English, and good advice, I'd claim (though wouldn't expect everyone to agree) that it has a hint of (оттенок?) americanism to it. That is, in people over a certain age, I would expect to see "...keeping?" in a British English letter.

Но это не совет - просто случайный комментарий по поводу использования )

I was simply lying flat staring at the ceiling. Улучшенный порядок слов

After drying my hair I went to my sister. Я предлагал бы, "...went to my sister's" - выглядит более естественно.

On my way back home when I was in the zebra crossing... на мой взгляд, лучший вариант было бы, "On my way back home, while crossing (at) a zebra crossing..."

Though simply, "while I was on a zebra crossing" is fine, but slightly unnatural. Лучше, что-то вроде, "On my way back home, half/part way across a zebra crossing, I was almost run over by a speeding car." The "on" sounds a little unusual, but repeating "crossing" might not sound natural to many, either.

These are minor comments, of course. The original is very well written.

22 พฤศจิกายน 2014

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