Something About Me:
My name is Mary. I was born in Padua, Italy and I am 40 years old. I currently live in a flat with my husband and my daughter Claire in a town called Cam, a little village very close to Venice. I work in the import-export department of a company that trades in shoes and bags.
This year I am taking an intermediate level English course to further my skills in the language. Next year I'm planning on taking an intermediate-upper level course. My area of focus (or "I majored in...") in college was accounting. I also studied French and German, which I have utilized at work for the last eight years, but now I mainly use English. In my opinion, German is the most difficult language to learn. French is less difficult than German, and English is the easiest. I also studied Spanish, but I only know the basics.
Most people consider me to be sociable, open-minded, sensitive, kind, (I omitted "friendly" because it basically means the same thing as "kind") and elegant in behavior ("dignified"? "proper"- I'm not sure what you want to say here). When I first meet someone, I am reserved but warm up after I feel more comfortable.
I enjoy the simple things in life, like a sunny day or the summer breeze on my face. I think I'm a lucky girl (or lady) because I don't need expensive things or extreme experiences to be happy. In my work, I am very active; this could be the reason why I'm so lazy in my free time!
Wow what a great job! This is just an alternative to Seth's above. I did a little reworking and combined some sentences so there weren't several short ones together. I also wrote out your numbers. Generally the "rule of thumb" is to write out numbers less than 10. I also took out some redundent (or "goes without saying" sentences). As I am learning in the Italian language you can say something several different ways, but if you want to sound Italian there is a certain way to say it! This is just my English take on your paragraph. I am not an English teacher but this is "just my two cents!" — As we say in America. Keep going you are doing an awesome job! I wish I knew as much in Italian!
Something About Me
My name is Mary. I was born in Padua and I'm 40 years old. I live in Cam; a little village very close to Venice. I live in a flat with my husband and my daughter. Her name's Claire.
I work in the import-export department of a company which trades in shoes and bags.
This year I'm attending an intermediate level English course to improve my English and I'm going to attend an intermediate-upper course next year. I think that the course next year will be more difficult than this one. I studied accountancy but I studied also French and German. I used these 2 languages for work for 8 years but now the language that I use at most is English. In my opinion, German is the most difficult language to learn. French is less difficult than German. English is the easiest. I also studied also Spanish but I have only a basic knowledge of it. I consider myself an open-minded person. The Others find me sociable, friendly, kind, elegant in behavior and sensitive.
At the beginning I'm reserved when I'm not confident in the other people.
I enjoy the common things. I like simple things like a sunny day or a summer breeze on my face. I think to be I'm a lucky girl because I don't need luxury goods or extreme experiences to be happy. In my work I'm very active. This could be the reason why I'm so lazy in my free time.
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Very well written. This may look like a lot of correction but it isn't at all; mostly I think you need to focus on word order and spelling. I'm surprised to hear that you find German so difficult; I always believed that it was very similar to English :)