please Correct my notebook. I write very interesting and short story. I am writing 1 cookup story.In this story is playing four characters, there name are Rinki, Mrs Bhalla, Mihir and Raman. Mrs. Bhal

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please Correct my notebook. I write very interesting and short story. I am writing 1 cookup story.In this story is playing four characters, there name are Rinki, Mrs Bhalla, Mihir and Raman. Mrs. Bhalla is Mother of Rinki and Raman. So that's mean Rinki and Raman are brother-sister. and Mihir is a husband of Rinki. Rinki talks to Mrs. Bhalla and talks about Mihir going to US, and there is no one to help us, we have to make everything on our own. Mrs. Bhalla says yes, your dad has nothing now, why should we take Raman’s help, right? Maybe Mihir has savings so he is doing this. Rinki says Raman feels he controls our life, so he is sending Mihir to US, I told Mihir to shift me in new flat. Mrs. Bhalla understands Rinki has ignited fire in her home, and asked Mihir for the flat, poor Mihir.

29 ก.ค. 2015 เวลา 13:57

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please Correct my notebook. I am writing a very interesting and short story.

I am writing 1 cookup story. In this story are four characters, there name are Rinki, Mrs Bhalla, Mihir and Raman. Mrs. Bhalla is the Mother of Rinki and Raman. So that's mean Rinki and Raman are siblings. and Mihir is Rinki's husband.

Rinki talks to Mrs. Bhalla about Mihir going to US, and there is no one to help them, theyhave to make everything on their own. Mrs. Bhalla says "yes, your dad has nothing now, why can't we take Raman’s help?" Maybe Mihir has savings so he is doing this. Rinki says "Raman think he is in controls of our lives, so he is sending Mihir to US, I told Mihir to let me shift to the new flat". Mrs. Bhalla understands Rinki has ignited fire in her home, and asked Mihir for the flat, poor Mihir.

(maaf kijiye, i corrected the ones i understood. but you are really wonderful, aur aapka story bahut acchi hain)

3 สิงหาคม 2015

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