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smoking I’ve been smoking for more than 10 years. I didn’t like my father’s smoky taste, and he died of liver cancer due to drink too much liquor since I was 14 years old. Once I thought I never smoke because of his dying, but now I am doing what he did. I tried to quit smoking last Saturday, because I wanted to become a better man. Although I couldn't quit it right away, I’ve reduced one-third. I’m keeping away temptation that makes me want to smoke, and I hope that I will make it.
31 ส.ค. 2015 เวลา 3:44
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非常好。很好读。


smoking Smoking

I’ve been smoking for more than 10 years.


I didn’t like my father’s smoky taste smell, and he died of liver cancer when I was 14 years old due to drink because he drank too much liquor since when I was 14 years old.

这是“taste"还是”smell"?

你十四岁的时候你父亲死了?还是从你十四岁的时候你父亲喝太多了?

 

Once I thought I would never smoke because of his dying, but now I am doing what he did.

 

I tried to quit smoking last Saturday, because I wanted to become a better man.

 

Although I couldn't quit it right away, I’ve reduced one-third.

 

I’m keeping away temptation that makes me want to smoke, and I hope that I will make it.

 

31 สิงหาคม 2015
This is a nice paragraph, very easy to understand. Good luck! If you stop smoking for a few days, I think your body will feel better.
31 สิงหาคม 2015
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