Clean up the beach --- 淨灘

Last Sunday, I went to a beach which is in the northeast of Taipei. I was thinking about whether I should be there or not because I went alone and I am a little shy, but the goal is clean up the beach and I want to do something meaningful, so I overcome my fear and do it. After cleaning, I found many people who came alone but were more brave than me. I also met some nice friends there although we just knew each other for a while. I was encouraged by this experience and I felt much better than I thought I would. Can't wait to attend the next activity! Do it or you will never know what you'll get!

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Cleaning up the beach --- 淨灘 ("Clean up the beach"聽起來象命令)

Last Sunday, I went to a beach where is in the northeast of Taipei ("northeast of Taipei"的意思是台北外面的東北部; "northeast Taipei"的意思是在台北的東北部). I was wondering whether I should be there or not, because I went alone and I am a little shy, but the goal was to clean up the beach and I wanted to do something meaningful, so I overcame my fear and did it. After cleaning, I found many people came alone but they were braver than me.(正式： "braver than I (was),"； 隨便（英文老師不會喜歡，但是講英語的人常常說的）： "braver than me")  Besides, I met some nice friends there although we'd just known each other for a while. I was encouraged by this experience and I felt much better than I expected. Can't wait to attend the next activity! Do it or you will never know what you are missing!

寫得不錯 ：）我認識這個感覺，我覺得咱們的性格應該差不多。我離沙灘不太近，但是我參加過淨校園的活動。好在我爸爸陪我。

Clean up the beach --- 淨灘

Last Sunday, I went to a beach where is in the northeast of Taipei. I was thinking about  unsure if I should be there wanted to go or not because I was going alone and I am a little shy. However,  I wanted to do something meaningful so I overcame my fear and went to the beach cleanup.the goal is clean up the beach and I want to do something meaningful, so I overcome my fear and done it. After cleaning, I found many brave people who also came alone. but they are brave than me, besides, I met some nice friends there although we just knew each other for a while. I was encouraged by this experience and I felt much better than I thought. I can't wait to attend next activity! Do it or you will never know how much fun it is.