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Please help me to correct errors in my writing! This writing is about my future. I'm poor at English, so please help me! If you have any ideas or expressions to make this writing better, you can change my writing without any limitation! Next year, I'm going to enter the military, especially KATUSA. KATUSA is the army who is on a joint duty with U.S. soldiers in Korea. In there, I want to be exposed to English in real-life situations and understand American Culture. To be the teacher, I surely study not only the English for tests but also the way of use in real English life to explain students more easily like why this grammar is needed here. I believe these things will make my English skill better, So I apply to there and I really want to be the one of them. When I become 25, I will be discharged from the army and come back to university. From that time, I will study the English and other kinds of subjects which are needed to become a teacher. I always thought I want to be a teacher since I was enter the university, so there will be no reasons to hesitate in the future. When I'm 28, I will graduate from the university and take the teacher certification examination. Because of the reason that I would be study formal and informal usage of English at KATUSA, I will pass the exam. Experience in KATUSA is the key to get through. One or two years later, my life will be stabilized and my mind will be relaxed. It's the perfect time to seek and meet someone I want to marry. When I'm turned to 30, maybe I will get married. I always want a virtuous wife not a girl who have only a beautiful face, so I'll find her with great effort. And If I think 'She is my girl' just for once, then I will catch her without fail. And, I will be a two kids' good father and an attentive husband to my wife. Of course, Happily ever after.
15 Thg 09 2013 10:39
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Please help me to correct errors in my writing!

This entry is about my future.
I have poor English skills, so please help me!
If you have any ideas or expressions to make my writing better, you can make changes to it without any limitations!

Next year, I'm going to enter the military, I particulary want to enter KATUSA. KATUSA is an army who is on a joint duty with U.S. soldiers in Korea. In KATUSA, I want to be exposed to English in real life situations and understand the American culture. To be a teacher, I will not only study English for tests, but also use English in real life situations to explain to students why certain grammar is needed in an easier way. I believe these things will improve my English skills. So, I will apply to KATUSA and I hope to become one of them.

When I become 25, I will be discharged from the army and come back to the university to resume my studies. From then, I will study English and other subjects which are required to become a teacher. I always wanted to be a teacher since I entered university, so there will be no reason for me to hesitate in the future.

When I'm 28, I will graduate from the university and take the teacher certification examination. Because I would study formal and informal usage of English at KATUSA, I will pass the exam. Experiencing KATUSA is the key to get through. One or two years later, my life will be stable and my mind will be relaxed. So, it would be the perfect time to meet someone I want to marry.

When I turn 30, I might want to get married. I always thought about wanting a virtuous wife. I don't want a girl who only has a beautiful face; so, I'll find her with great effort. And, If I think "She is my girl" just once, I will catch her without fail. Also, I will be a good father to two kids and an attentive husband to my wife. Of course, I'll live happily ever after.

 

 

-Great entry~ Don't doubt yourself, you have very good written English skills!

18 tháng 9 năm 2013
Yuri's correction is great, so I won't offer one of my own. I do want to echo her sentiments that your written English is very, very good. Quite impressive! Good luck to you.
18 tháng 9 năm 2013
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