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For the record,there is no big mistakes,however,it not very 'native',here is what I suggest it should be like.(Hope you don't mind I write it in simple madarin)
广州旅行的第一天
昨天我们到到了广州,现在住在一家很舒适的酒店,从房间的窗户能看到珠江。今天在酒店餐厅我们吃了一顿很不错的中式早餐。我的丈夫要开会,所以我一个人出去观光。我去了孙中山纪念堂;然后去了石室天主教堂,不巧它正好关门了。在教堂门口我碰到了两个来自佛山的高中学生,我们一起聊了会儿天。广州的天气十分炎热,还很潮湿,所以今天剩下的时间我可能还是呆在酒店里面比较好,游个泳锻炼身体(I assume there is a swimming pool in your hospital,otherwise we need to say 出去游个泳... not in hotel),然后休息(游泳、锻炼、休息、等等 is OK,but normally we don't say like that)。
廣州旅行的第一天
昨天我們到達了廣州,現在住在一家很舒服的酒店,從房間的窗戶裡可能看到珠江。今天在酒店餐廳裡, 我們吃了一頓很好的中式早餐。因為我的丈夫要赴會參加會議,所以我一個人出去觀光。首先我去了孫中山紀念堂,然後去了石室天主教堂,不幸巧它剛剛關門了。不过还好, 在教堂門前口我碰到了兩個來自佛山的高中學生,就隨意我們一起聊聊天。廣州的天氣十分炎熱,還有潮濕難受,所以今天剩下的時間就我可能呆在酒店裡面,或者去游泳、鍛煉、休息、等等。
Glad that you made it :) Wow, still have time to write! Hope you are over jetlag already... No major problem in you essay, just to show you better choice of words. We just had a minor tremble over in LA :(
廣州旅行的第一天
昨天我們到達廣州,現在住在一家很舒服的酒店,從房間的窗戶能看到珠江。今天在酒店餐廳我們吃了一頓很好的中式早餐。我的丈夫要參加會議,所以我一個人出去觀光。我去了孫中山紀念堂,然後去了石室天主教堂,不巧它剛剛關門了。在教堂門口我碰到了兩個來自佛山的高中學生,我們一起聊聊天。廣州的天氣十分炎熱,還有很潮濕,所以今天剩下的時間我可能呆在酒店裡面,游泳、鍛煉、休息、等。
Excellent.
聊聊天 is only used in an imperative like "咱们聊聊天吧", or to describe a habit, as in "我们经常在一起聊聊天"(though you can also say "聊天" in this sentence. The difference might be that "聊聊天" sounds more relaxing than 聊天). It's unusual to use it to refer to a particular chat, such as today's chat between you and the two high school students
潮湿 is not a noun, but an adjective.
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