Iamtheman
Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to stay with their families for longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better? Use specific reasons and example to support your answers. Well this is the answer I came up with.... In my opinion, children who are not treated the way a child should be, aren't fond of their parents and want independence from their parents because, if the parents are kind enough to their children and love them, they inturn get the love back. I mean a child will not hate his/her parents just like that.There must be some reason, may be the parents are too strict or are too harsh when their child commits a mistake.I don't say the parents are at fault everytime. Sometimes, there can be misunderstanding between the parents and the child or some bad influence on the child by his/her friends or relatives might be the reason between the hatred.So, that is why I think some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. On the other hand, if the relationship between the parents and their child is good then the children wouldn't like to leave their parents. Infact, if the child really loves his/her parents they would not leave them ever. Even a thought of them living with their parents would be like a torment for them. Such is the bond of love. I mean who on Earth loves a child more than their parents! but, then again all humans aren't alike and their behavior isn't similar too.As stated above sometimes the parents are at fault and sometimes the children and sometimes there are misunderstandings. I think as parents are mature and experienced than their children, they should be more careful and considerate when upbringing their children without being too lenient to them. I myself want to live with my parents as long as I could because they gave life to me, fed me , brought me up and sacrificed many things for me and in no way I could return their favor. If I leave my parents then I couldn't forgive myself in my whole life. So, I hope to be more obedient and faithful to them and strive to become a good son. A son my parents wished that I would become one day, because I got the parents that I know are the best one could get. On a scale of 0-5 what would you rate this essay .Was my writing and idea clear. Where do i need to improve. Thank you all.
26 Thg 10 2014 11:48
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Thank you. I'll work on it.
4 tháng 11 năm 2014
I would give this about a 4/5. Your idea was clear, and you used decent sized words in your essay (akin to a year 9 or 10 in my school). You may want to work on your punctuation, which seems to be the biggest fault.
26 tháng 10 năm 2014
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