月球的表面

在一个几天前的晚上，我有机会用妹夫的超强望远镜看月球。用这种超强的望远镜我能看到月球表面所有的细节。月坑，rilles （月球沟），我能看到一切！月球的顶部有一个很大的月坑，这个月坑的外面在很多不同的角度有许多月球沟向外延伸，这肯定是由一次巨大冲击裂造成的。其实看到了月球的表面让我明白月球经历过这么多冲击事件。

我对天体物理学很感兴趣。对我来说，这是个非常特别的经历。用自己的眼睛看月球，月球上的地形能看得那么清楚，这正是让我着迷的原因。不过，因为我从来没有用过汉语说这种话题，所以写这篇日记非常不容易。希望大家看得懂，能帮助我改正错误。谢谢。
A few nights ago, I had the opportunity to use my brother in laws very powerful telescope to look at the moon. Using this type of powerful telescope, I could see all the details on the surface of the moon. Lunar craters, rilles (lunar trenches) , I could see everything! At the top of the moon there is a massive crater, this crater has loads of rilles leading off it at lots of different angles, this was definitely caused by a huge impact. In fact, seeing the surface of the moon made me appreciate just how many impact events the moon has witnessed.

I am really interested in astrophysics. For me, this was a very special experience. Seeing the moon with my own eyes, being able to see the topography of the moon so clearly, it really got me mesmerized. However, I have never used Chinese to talk about this type of subject before, so writing this diary was really hard. I hope everyone can understand it, and help me to correct any errors. Thank you.

月球的表面

几晚上天之前的一个晚上（通常用“几天”来说明“a few days ago”，然后再强调特定时间“晚上”），我有机会用妹夫的强大望远镜看月球。用这种强大的望远镜我能让我看到月球表面所有的细节。（原话正确，我只是换了种方式）月坑，rilles （月球沟），我能看到一切！月球的顶部有一个很大的月坑，这个月坑的外面在很多不同的角度有许多月球沟向外延伸有许多月球沟以很多不同的角度向外延伸，这肯定是由一次巨大冲击裂引起的。其实看到了月球的表面让我理解月球见证经历过这么多冲击事件。 

我对天体物理学很有兴趣。对我来说，这是个非常特别的经历。用自己的眼睛看月球，能看得那么清楚月球上的地形，这真是让我着迷的。不过，因为我从来没有用过汉语说这种话题，所以写这篇日记非常不容易。希望大家看得懂，能帮助我改正错误。谢谢。
A few nights ago, I had the opportunity to use my brother in laws very powerful telescope to look at the moon. Using this type of powerful telescope, I could see all the details on the surface of the moon. Lunar craters, rilles (lunar trenches) , I could see everything! At the top of the moon there is a massive crater, this crater has loads of rilles leading off it at lots of different angles, this was definitely caused by a huge impact. In fact, seeing the surface of the moon made me appreciate just how many impact events the moon has witnessed.

I am really interested in astrophysics. For me, this was a very special experience. Seeing the moon with my own eyes, being able to see the topography of the moon so clearly, it really got me mesmerized. However, I have never used Chinese to talk about this type of subject before, so writing this diary was really hard. I hope everyone can understand it, and help me to correct any errors. Thank you.

几個晚上之前，我有机会用妹夫的强大望远镜看月球。用这种强大的望远镜，我能看到月球表面所有的细节。月坑，、rilles （月球沟），我能看到一切！*月球的顶部有一个很大的月坑，。这个月坑的外面，在很多不同的角度，有许多月球沟向外延伸，这肯定是由一次巨大冲击裂引起的。其实看到了月球的表面，让我理解月球见证过这么多冲击事件。

*这样的英文结构，汉语中以顿号(丶)表示更理想。

我对天体物理学很有兴趣。对我来说，这是个非常特别的经历。用自己的眼睛看月球，能將月球上的地形看得那么清楚，这真是让我着迷的。不过，因为我从来没有用过以汉语说過这种话题*，所以写这篇日记非常不容易。希望大家看得懂，能帮助我改正错误。谢谢。

虽然“用过”并不算错误的词，但因为你的中文水平很高了，换一个更文雅的字。

A few nights ago, I had the opportunity to use my brother in laws very powerful telescope to look at the moon. Using this type of powerful telescope, I could see all the details on the surface of the moon. Lunar craters, rilles (lunar trenches) , I could see everything! At the top of the moon there is a massive crater, this crater has loads of rilles leading off it at lots of different angles, this was definitely caused by a huge impact. In fact, seeing the surface of the moon made me appreciate just how many impact events the moon has witnessed.

I am really interested in astrophysics. For me, this was a very special experience. Seeing the moon with my own eyes, being able to see the topography of the moon so clearly, it really got me mesmerized. However, I have never used Chinese to talk about this type of subject before, so writing this diary was really hard. I hope everyone can understand it, and help me to correct any errors. Thank you.

月球的表面

几晚上之前，我有机会用妹夫的强大望远镜看月球。用这种强大的望远镜我能看到月球表面所有的细节。月坑，rilles （月球沟），我能看到一切！月球的顶部有一个很大的月坑，这个月坑的外面在很多不同的角度有许多月球沟从很多不同角度向外延伸，这肯定是由一次巨大冲击裂引起的。其实，看到了月球的表面，让我理解了月球见证过这么多冲击事件。

我对天体物理学很有兴趣。对我来说，这是个非常特别的经历。用自己的眼睛看月球，能看得那么清楚把月球上的地形看得那么清楚，这真是让我着迷的。不过，因为我从来没有用过汉语说这种话题，所以写这篇日记非常不容易。希望大家看得懂，能帮助我改正错误。谢谢。
A few nights ago, I had the opportunity to use my brother in laws very powerful telescope to look at the moon. Using this type of powerful telescope, I could see all the details on the surface of the moon. Lunar craters, rilles (lunar trenches) , I could see everything! At the top of the moon there is a massive crater, this crater has loads of rilles leading off it at lots of different angles, this was definitely caused by a huge impact. In fact, seeing the surface of the moon made me appreciate just how many impact events the moon has witnessed.

I am really interested in astrophysics. For me, this was a very special experience. Seeing the moon with my own eyes, being able to see the topography of the moon so clearly, it really got me mesmerized. However, I have never used Chinese to talk about this type of subject before, so writing this diary was really hard. I hope everyone can understand it, and help me to correct any errors. Thank you.

写的很好。very good