My resume. Can you help me with the correction?
Human Resources Expert
Interested in a position which is oriented to coordinate teams, set goals and strategies that help achieve the objectives of productivity, sales and services from you organization.
Experience
HR Managment
GRUPO HDH (Dec 2013- Sep 2016)
Compensations and salary strategies. Development of procedures, instructions and formats From the quality system, job profiles, Training Needs Analysis, training program, management training, Development and application of performance evaluations, KPI’s, answers and solutions to internal and external audits. Management of 8 trainers
Human Resources Coordination
CREDITO REAL SAB DE CV SOFOM ENR (Nov 2011-Jul 2013)
Management of 10 branch offices. Recruitment and staff selection. KPI´s. Labor relations, employees’ development and evaluations. Development programs based on competences, relationship with government agencies, handle and analysis of indicators for action plans.
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"Interested in a position which is oriented to coordinate teams, set goals and strategies that help achieve the objectives of productivity, sales and services from you organization."
I would change this to:
"Interested in a position which is oriented towards coordinating teams, setting goals and strategies that help improve productivity, and sales and services from your organization."
(If you are applying in the USA, remember that we use the oxford comma!)
Other corrections -
Experience:
HR Management
GRUPO HDH (Dec 2013- Sep 2016)
Compensation and salary strategies. Development of procedures, instructions, and formats from the quality system, job profiles, analysis of training needs, training program, management training, development and application of performance evaluations, KPI’s, and answers and solutions to internal and external audits. Manager of 8 trainers.
Human Resources Coordination
CREDITO REAL SAB DE CV SOFOM ENR (Nov 2011-Jul 2013)
Management of 10 branch offices. Recruitment and staff selection. KPI´s. Labor relations, employees’ development and evaluations. Development programs based on competences, relationship with government agencies, and handle and analysis of indicators for action plans.
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Consider changing the format to one that concentrates on the problems you solved and the results you achieved. This is process-based: is that what the company wants? Maybe: what were the problems; how did you address them; what were the outcomes and results?
This doesn't make sense to me:
'Development programs based on competences, relationship with government agencies, and handle and analysis of indicators for action plans.'
Maybe: 'Wrote programs based on the competencies needed to manage relationships with government agencies, including action plans and the analysis of key outcome indicators..?' but I don't know.
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