I took a picture which is a 20years old celebration . I wore a clothe which is called "Hurisode". Hurisode is Japanese traditional dress, I wore red dress. It was so tight and heavy, but so gorgeous.

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I took a picture which is a 20years old celebration . I wore a clothe which is called "Hurisode". Hurisode is Japanese traditional dress, I wore red dress. It was so tight and heavy, but so gorgeous. My mother looked like happy watching me. I was so happy too. I want to be a special person until I will be 20 years old.

15 มิ.ย. 2025 เวลา 14:55

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I took a picture at a celebration for turning 20 years old. I wore clothing called a furisode. A furisode is a traditional Japanese dress. I wore a red one. It was tight and heavy, but very beautiful. My mother looked happy watching me. I was very happy too. I want to become a special person by the time I turn 20.

Improved Version: --- I took a photo at my 20th birthday celebration. I wore a traditional Japanese dress called a furisode. Mine was red—tight, heavy, but truly beautiful. My mother seemed happy to see me in it, and I felt really happy too. I want to grow into someone special by the time I turn 20. --- Short Explanations: 1. “a picture which is a 20years old celebration” → “a picture at a celebration for turning 20” Clearer word order and grammar. 2. “a clothe” → “clothing” or “a dress” “Clothe” is a verb. Use “clothing” or “a dress” for garments. 3. “Hurisode” → “furisode” Correct spelling (romanized form). Use italics for foreign words. 4. “looked like happy” → “looked happy” “Look like” is followed by a noun; here you need an adjective. 5. “until I will be 20” → “by the time I turn 20” “By the time” is the natural phrase for goals before a certain age.

16 มิ.ย. 2025 เวลา 16:47

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