Angie
Axel was a tall guy who was in at his high school basketball's team. Unlike his teammates, he wasn't the best basketball player but he was the smartes and thanks to his strategies his team achieved to arrive the finals. Axel's mind developed all kind of plan for preventing all kind of obstacles and distracting situation that could take away their victory. Everything seemed like if it was working, however at the last minutes the match was tied, and he was the only who had the chance to make the shot victory. He threw the ball to the hoop and in that moment he felt as if the time frozen, he saw the ball was hovering on the air and suddenly a death bird which came from the sky hit the ball near the hoop diverting the path of it... none of his plan could stop that from happening.
7 ม.ค. 2025 เวลา 1:41
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Axel was a tall guy who was on his high school basketball team. Unlike his teammates, he wasn’t the best basketball player, but he was the smartest. Thanks to his strategies, his team managed to reach the finals. Axel's mind came up with all kinds of plans to prevent obstacles and distracting situations that could jeopardize their victory. Everything seemed to be working. However, in the final minutes, the match was tied, and Axel was the only one with a chance to make the winning shot. He threw the ball toward the hoop, and at that moment, he felt as if time had frozen. He saw the ball hovering in the air, but suddenly, a dead bird fell from the sky and hit the ball near the hoop, diverting its path. None of his plans could have prevented that from happening.
I wasn't sure about "a death bird". Were you speaking of a type of bird that hunts for other animals and it dove down and hit the ball purposely? Or do you mean that a bird died while it was flying and its body landed on the ball? It will change the structure and meaning of the sentence. If you could provide more context that would help me help you :)
7 ม.ค. 2025 เวลา 1:56
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Axel was a tall guy who was playing in his high school basketball's team. Unlike his teammates, he wasn't the best basketball player but he was the smartest and thanks to his strategies, his team managed to make it to the finale. Axel developed/made up all kind of plan for preventing all kind of obstacle and distracting situation that could take away their victory. Everything seemed to be working but at the last minute, the match was tied and Andy was the only player who had the chance to make the final shot that would ensure victory. He threw the ball towards the hoop and at that moment, he felt as if time froze. As he watched the ball hovering in the air it was as if a bird of ill omen hit it near the hoop and diverting it... none of his plan could stop that from happening.
I wasn't sure about your bird metaphor, I'm not sure mine is the best either so don't hesitate to rectify my correction if needed.
7 ม.ค. 2025 เวลา 8:59
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Axel was a tall guy who was in his high school basketball team. Unlike his teammates, he wasn't the best basketball player but he was the smartest and thanks to his strategies his team got into the finals. Axel developed all kinds of plans to prevent all kind of obstacles and distracting tactics that could take away their victory. Everything seemed like if it was working, however at the last minute the match was tied, and he was the only one who had the chance to take the victory shot . He threw the ball to the hoop and in that moment he felt as if time had frozen, he saw the ball hovering in the air and suddenly a bird swooped from the sky and hit the ball near the hoop diverting its path ... none of his plans could stop that from happening.
7 ม.ค. 2025 เวลา 7:52
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