It is important that people choose a career when they are still quite young. Do
you agree? ESSAY Some people know what career they want to do when they are very
young, other people know it later or never. You need to study hard to prepare for a career. The question here is: is it important to choose a career while
still very young? Due to the current health emergency, the way to
teach is changing drastically. In fact, the telematics methods are increasingly
in use and students from primary school to university are studying from
their houses. However, the goal is the same: people obtain knowledge. Nowadays,
the world economy is in crisis and future generations of professionals will
have to deal with it. They may solve it or it may get worse. The education
is very important in this context because solving it requires that the people have
enough knowledge to deal with the situation. In my opinion there are teenagers
who are concerned about their future and work hard to achieve their goals
through a good academic background, but the most of them are not aware of
the importance of their studies and waste their time in other matters more
enjoyable. Maybe they will do the right thing later. In conclusion, adult people
maybe have more encourage to do a career or start their own business than quite
young people who are more dispersed [not sure what this sentence means, or
what you are trying to say]. However, if you choose your career early
you have more time to develop it. To conclude, choosing a career so
young can be important but not crucial.
Perhaps: "encourage" is a verb... do you mean to say that "adults have more courage?".
Or do you mean to say "adults should be encouraged to start their own businesses"?
Also, "young people who are more dispersed"... "dispersed" usually means "physically
distant". Did you mean to say that "young people are more distracted from the goal
of choosing and preparing for their career"?
Overall, good job on an ambitious essay.