Sure, I can take a look at it and give you some ideas for corrections. If you'd like to study some American TV shows or movies, feel free to book a tutoring session with me. What shows do you watch?

乔老师，您好。我认为最大的挑战是不知道怎么用英语思维表达，很多说出去的英语都是中文翻译过去的，这就是常说的“中式英语”。

应对这个问题，多看美剧或者电影吧。学习国外地道地的表达，但是有些东西还是中国特色或者美国特色，这个估计就只能看个人理解了。do you agree with me ? 

In additon, I am writing personal statement and try to apply for ph.d program at American University. Wound you mind helping me correct my personal statement ? Thank you very much.