My cat
I once took a stray cat home from the street. She was so cranky in the beginning and not a fan of petting. Every time I got closer to her, she hissed and tried to scratch me. Time had been passing and she began to realize that I wouldn't hurt her, she lowered her guard and became more docile. I feel like we are totally capable of changing the way animals get along with us bit by bit, but trust couldn't be built overnight
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My cat
I once took a stray cat home from the street. She was so cranky in the beginning and not a fan of petting. Every time I got close to her, she hissed and tried to scratch me. As time passed and she began to realize that I wouldn't hurt her, she lowered her guard and became more docile. I feel like we are totally capable of changing the way animals get along with us, bit by bit, but trust can't be built overnight
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My cat
I once took a stray cat home from the street. She was so cranky in the beginning and not a fan of petting. Every time I got closer to her, she hissed and tried to scratch me. As time passed and she began to realize that I wouldn't hurt her, she lowered her guard and became more docile. I feel like we are totally capable of changing the way animals get along with us bit by bit, but trust couldn't be built overnight.
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My cat
I once took a stray cat home from the street. She was so cranky in the beginning and not very fond of petting. Every time I got closer to her, she hissed and tried to scratch me. As time passed, she began to realize that I wouldn't hurt her, she lowered her guard and became more docile. I feel like we are totally capable of changing the way animals get along with us bit by bit, but trust can't be built overnight.
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My cat
I once took a stray cat home from the street. She was so cranky in the beginning and not a fan of petting. Every time I got closer to her, she hissed and tried to scratch me. Time had been passing and she began to realize that I wouldn't hurt her, she lowered her guard and became more docile. I feel like we are totally capable of changing the way animals get along with us bit by bit, but trust can't be built overnight.
All corrections have been written in different styles. I would only change couldn't to can't, this leaves your text intact.
"as time passed" instead of "time had been passing" I think reads more naturally.
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My Cat
I once took in a stray cat off the street with the hope of making it a pet. Naturally, she was rather fearful of me in the beginning, and certainly not a big fan of allowing people to hold or pet her. Back then, every time that I approached her quickly or came within touching distance, she would hiss and try to scratch me. As time passed though, and she began to realize I would not hurt her, she gradually lowered her guard and became less defensive, and now, she acts like any other household cat in terms of allowing people to hold and pet her. I feel that we are very capable of changing, little by little, the way animals—feral or not--see us, but building that trust cannot happen overnight.*
Hi, Ethan. Good job! Whatever changes I made were to allow your sentences to sound more natural to my native ears, to clarify your thoughts, and for ease of reading. Sincere apologies if I have misinterpreted. I hope that this helps you. J.
*As Merlyn pointed out, there was nothing wrong, per se, with your original. However, generally speaking, we “take” things away from us, or our home, but we “bring” things closer to us, or our home. Of course, had you used the phrasal verb, “took in” (meaning to allow someone or something to stay) that is an entirely different matter.
Additionally, the word “stray” is not synonymous with “homeless,” it typically means “wandering” or “lost” as well (my point being, you wrote, “I took the stray cat home,” which is ambiguous—your home or the cat’s home? Without further explanation, the reader has to fill it in, which may or may not be correct). Finally, perhaps it is just me, but I did not see a connection between your title and your text. These points are relevant to your post, and thus, should be addressed, even if briefly, within your text.
P.S. Since you obviously did not pick her up or carry her back then, I am very curious as to how you managed to bring her home (bribed her with meat or cat food?).
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