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story I’m going to tell story that happened with me last week. I was coming back at home from a party about 02.00 a.m. on Saturday. And when my way was getting finished unexpectedly for me I saw a naked guy that appeared from the bushes. He was worn just in underwear and he kept plastic bag in his hands. I was extremely shocked. He asked me to help him. -“Could you tell me where I am?”, - asked me strange guy. -“Leninskiy district, Agalakova street”, - I answered him. -“No, no which city?”, - asked he again. -“Chelyabinsk”, - I said. He very disappointed in my answer because he had had a trip from Yamal to Ufa. He didn’t remember anything e.g. how and why he left the train and got in almost 500 kilometers from home. I’ve decided to call to police. After brief conversation with operator on hot line I told that guy stay and wait for a police. After this strange meeting I continued my way. In 500 meters I saw a police car. There was two policemen. In that moment I really prouded of police because it seemed they work very fast. -“Hello, the naked guy there”, - I pointed direction. -“What? Who are you? Which guy? “, - amazedly answered a policeman. -“A naked guy, he’s lost and he need for help”, - I said them. -“Has he had a knife on his hands? Has he had blood on his stomach?” -“No, he hasn’t”, - I answered them. -“So, we are looking for another guy. Good bye!”

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I’m going to tell a story that happened with to me last week. I was coming back at home from a party about around 02.00 a.m. on Saturday. And when my way trip [or "going" or "journey"] was getting almost finished, unexpectedly for me I saw a naked guy that appeared from the bushes. He was only worn just in wearing underwear and he kept held plastic bag in his hands. I was extremely shocked. He asked me to help him.
“Could you tell me where I am?,” asked me the strange guy.
“Leninskiy district, Agalakova street,” I answered him.
“No, no which city?,” asked he asked again.
“Chelyabinsk,” I said.
He was very disappointed in my answer because he had had a trip from Yamal to Ufa. He didn’t remember anything - e.g., how and why he left the train and got in almost 500 kilometers from home. I’ve decided to call to the police. After a brief conversation with the operator on the hot line I told that the guy to stay and wait for a police officer [or "wait for the police"].
After this strange meeting I continued on my way. In After 500 meters I saw a police car. There was were two policemen. In that moment I was really prouded of the police because it seemed they work very fast.
“Hello, the naked guy there,” I pointed direction.
“What? Who are you? Which guy?,“ amazedly answered a policeman.
“A naked guy, he’s lost and he needs for help,” I said to them.
“Has he had a knife on in his hands? Has he had blood on his stomach?”
"Did he have a knife in his hands? Did he have blood on his stomach?" [While the sentence you wrote above is correct, it has a different meaning than what I think you intended to write.]
“No, he hasn’t didn't," I answered them.
“So, we are looking for another guy. Good bye!”

This was a very good story and I think that it was well written - there were only a few easy to fix grammar mistakes. Also, remember that commas go inside the quotation marks when someone is talking.

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