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Rubens Santos
Iguape and Ilha Comprida I'm really into writing, so here is another text. A few years ago, I lived in a small city, Iguape, for around four years. I lived there from 2010 to 2013. I didn't fancy this city from the very start. But after a few months, I grew to love it. Why I'm not falling in love at first sight? Iguape is smaller than all the cities which I lived before. It's so difficult to find everything you want fastly, and almost every store closes before dark. Many things made me changes my mind. Iguape is near the sea, near the forest. Around 70% of the city is preserved area because in this city we have the last part of the Mata Atlântica. My last place was very close to the wood. After five minutes on foot, I was inside it. I went to a walk there three times a week, at least. Another activity I loved to do there was cycling. Another city, actually an island, Ilha Comprida, which is like a district of Iguape, has 74 km of beaches. In this city, we can cycle near the sea. The most part doesn't have inhabitants. Life in Iguape and Ilha Comprida only is bad wether you don't have enough money. These cities are amazing places to spend your life. I went to live there because my ex-girlfriend went to work and live there. We lived together for three years. When we split up, I returned to my homeland. However, that period was the best in my life until now. The idea to live there again appeals to me.

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Iguape and Ilha Comprida

I'm really into writing, so here is another text.

A few years ago, I lived in a small city, Iguape, for around four years. I lived there from 2010 to 2013. I didn't fancy this city from the very start. But after a few months, I grew to love it. Why I'm not didn't I falling in love at first sight? Iguape is smaller than all the cities in which I had lived before. It's so difficult to find everything you want quickly, and almost every store closes before dark. Many things made me changes my mind. Iguape is near the sea and near the forest. Around 70% of the city is a protected area because in this city we have the last part of the Mata Atlântica. My last place was very close to the woods. After five minutes on foot, I was inside it. I went to for a walk there three times a week, at least.

Another activity I loved to do there was cycling. Another city, actually an island, Ilha Comprida, which is like a district of Iguape, has 74 km of beaches. In this city, we can cycle near the sea. The Most part doesn't have of it is uninhabited.

Life in Iguape and Ilha Comprida is only bad wether if you don't have enough money. These cities are amazing places to spend your life. I went to live there because my ex-girlfriend went to work and live there. We lived together for three years. When we split up, I returned to my homeland. However, that period was the best in my life until now. The idea to of living there again appeals to me.

Olá Rubens, quite a good effort!
"in which I had lived before" - the past perfect with "had", because it is something you did before the moment you are talking about.
Quickly. I have no idea why we don't say fastly. It's English!
I would possibly call Iguape a town, not a city, which is much bigger. Also Ilha Comprida sounds more like a municipality, since the people are dispersed over a region, not in an urban centre so much.
The last line you could also possibly say, "The idea of going back there to live..."
Well done and keep practicing. It looks and sounds like a fantastic place!
Simón.

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