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Paula GS
Life goals The subject of life goals has been widely debated. Some people claim that earning a large amount of money is crucial for happiness, while others think that free time is more valuable than that. On the one hand, it is true that money is necessary for living. With the increase in population and the scarce of resources, the prices of essential things have increased during the last years. However, you do not have to be rich in order to afford these things. By earning a common salary, you will be able to enjoy a good quality of life, even though you cannot travel to the most luxurious hotels or eat in the most expensive restaurants. On the other hand, time is something that you cannot buy and, therefore, it makes it more valuable. For instance, if you had all the money in the world but very little time to spare, you would not be able to enjoy that money. Nevertheless, in today's society people lead stressful lives and, in spite of its relevance, having free time has become an unusual occurrence. To sum up, even though both factors should be considered, having free time is far more important than wealth. If you have more free time you will be able to have a better quality of life regardless of whether you lead a more or less luxurious life.
6 ก.ค. 2020 เวลา 16:03
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Life goals

The subject of life goals has been widely debated. Some people claim that earning a large amount of money is crucial for happiness, while others think that free time is more valuable than that.

On the one hand, it is true that money is necessary for living. With the increase in population and the scarcity of resources, the prices of essential things have increased <s>during</s> over the last years. However, you do not have to be rich in order to afford these things. By earning an <s>common</s> average salary, you will be able to enjoy a good quality of life, even though you cannot <s>travel to</s> stay at the most luxurious hotels or eat <s>in</s> at the most expensive restaurants.

On the other hand, time is something that you cannot buy and, therefore, it makes it more valuable. For instance, if you had all the money in the world but very little time to spare, you would not be able to enjoy that money. Nevertheless, in today's society, people lead stressful lives and, in spite of its relevance, having free time has become an unusual occurrence.

To sum up, even though both factors should be considered, having free time is far more important than wealth. If you have more free time, you will be able to have a better quality of life, regardless of whether you lead a more or less luxurious life.

Hola Paula, muy bien hecho.
Sí, durante se traduce como "during", pero mejor "over" aquí. O, "in recent years".
"At" refiere al lugar, no la posición física, exactamente. Por ejemplo: <em>at</em> home - el lugar donde vives, no la casa como edifcio. I spend all day <em>at</em> work. (¿Dónde trabajo? No es importante.)
Bueno, espero que eso te ayude. Saludos desde Córdoba. Simón.
6 กรกฎาคม 2020
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Life goals

The debate around how to be happy rages on. Some claim that earning a large amount of money is crucial for happiness, while others think having free time is more valuable.

Of course, it is true that some money is a necessity. Over the past few years, an increase in population has led to a scarcity of resources, and, likewise, the price of essentials has increased. However, you do not have to be rich in order to afford these things. You can still enjoy a high quality of life on an average salary, even though you cannot travel to the most luxurious hotels or eat in the most expensive restaurants.

But, on the other hand, since no amount of money can buy time, time is more precious than money. For instance, if you had all the money in the world but very little time to spare, you could not enjoy that money. Unfortunately, people today lead busy lives, meaning that having and enjoying free time has become ever more rare.

In conclusion, even though having free time and money are both important, having free time is far more important than wealth. Having more free time will allow you to enjoy a higher quality of life, regardless of whether or not you can afford a luxurious lifestyle.
6 กรกฎาคม 2020
Many thanks for the corrections! :)
6 กรกฎาคม 2020
Hi! Just scrolling through; here are some things I noticed: > With the increase in population and the scarce of resources With the increase in population and the SCARCITY of resources > during the last years During the last while OR During the last few years (we wouldn't say something like "during the last years"... it wouldn't be clear if you meant last year, or how many years) Otherwise, super well-written! Bravo :)
6 กรกฎาคม 2020
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