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Guangzhou people focus on doing business, not making deals. Making a deal involves the transaction of buying and selling, and once the transaction is completed, that is the end of it. However, business means the more you do the bigger, the more alive and vibrant the business becomes.
Business endows Guangzhou with a unique view, culture and urban characteristics. To learn about this city, you might as well start with tracking the trail of business in Guangzhou. Every city has its streets which record the trail of its business. In Guangzhou, they are Shang Jiu and Xia Jiu Roads. Shangjiu and Xiajiu Roads are the best place to review the past history of Xiaguan. There goes the saying, “People know about Xiguan before they know Guangzhou.”The streets of Shang jiu and Xiajiu have a total length of 1.2km, with arcade buildings on both sides of the streets. These arcades stretch from one end of street to the other end of it, forming a long corridor, and therefore, arcades of both sides facing each other across a street.

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