TO MY DEAR FRIEND

Right now, my mind is all over the place. The friend who accompayied me [/My study-buddy] over the last two years has finally passed the exam. However, my exam is tomorrow. Over the last two years, we laughed, cried, taught each other and spent hours at the library burying ourselves in books. Today, she succeeded and deserved it. I should be happy for her but at the same time I can't help but feel nervous about the results of my own examination. I really want to keep pace with her and fight for the future, which I know will be full of challenges. GOOD LUCK!

Hard to translate "like ants on a hot pot"! Haha. I know what you mean but it's not an image we would see often in the West so if that's your audience I would go for something more neutral or try and find an equivalent UK saying!

Good luck with your exam results!!

P.s., Great writing! Most of the red is just to make the English sound more "natural".

TO MY DEAR FRIEND

At this moment, my mind is like ants on a hot pot. My friend who accompays with has kept me company me for two years has passed the exam eventually finally. However, my exam will be held tomorrow. During these two years, we laughed, felt disappointed, teached taught each other, stayed at the library, and buried ourselves in books. Today, she succeeded and deserves it. and I should be glad to heard this news. but at the same time, I feel quite a few bit nervous for about the unexpectable unpredictable nature of fate, the result of my examination. I really want to keep pace with her and fight for the future which is full of challenges. GOOD LUCK!