Composition

It's (vividly depicted) shown in the picture/The pictures show that the flowers have different fates. The little flower can grow under/in the greenhouse when face there is a high wind and heavy rain, (but can't flourish smil without the green house). The (most important) message in the cartoon is that the flower can't grow un in heavy rain.
As we know, there are many parents who wants to be their child's umbrella, and be very protective towards spoil them. How to educate the younger generation has become one of the most important topics. Although the younger generation can grow up better under their parents protection,what will they do when one day they face any problem by themselves oneday? Parents also need to think twice about their role in their child's life, and they must know that a greenhouse flower can't face heavy rain by itself*themselves. Parents should accompany and guide more; it's better for the younger generation.   *singular
Educational problems haves become a popular topic, which [haves been]/are disscussed not only by teachers, but also parents. I think good education should help the younger generation face different problems, and guide them to solve them* it. Only in this way can the younger generation could grow up faster and become the big tree.

*and guide them towards a solution / and give/provide guidance to solve them

Composition

[As is (subtly) shown in the (impressive) cartoon], there are/The cartoon shows two flowers in (the center of picture, with) different environment(s). What impress me/I notice is that the flowers have two different fates, and the flower in the greenhouse cannot grow in heavy rain. From the drawing, we can conclude that the education of young people er is very important.

From thise portrayal, we can conclude that the cartoonist wants to convey a message/[common phenomenon] that about how to educate the younger generation. In my opinion, the factors underlying/[sparking] this problem can be conattributed to the following reasons. To begin with/First, nowadays most of youngers people are the only child of/in their families. They are the 'apple in their family’s eyes' and naturally get/receive more attention/care. In addition, with rising/[the improvement of] living standards, parents have to spend more time to spend to keep their earnings. What’s more, the younger take it for granted that they can live better under their parents' protection.

My view is that, first of all, it is vital/essential/[of great necessity] of for the younger generation to face problems by themselves. Furthermore, our awareness has to be aroused/wakened/[cultivated and enhanced] to help the younger generation grow up, and learn to make the right decisions on in matters of importance/[emergence things]. Finally, it is high time that relevant steps were taken to improve/better the/this situation.