Writing excercise "No ideas, but in things "

Write a brief story told only in images – concrete, simple, visually efficient movements and details. What people do, what objects they crave and caress rather than what they say or think about these objects and actions.

A bright sun fills the empty kitchen. A large, ancient clock the size of a man tolls* six and the distant murmur of female voices slowly arises at the far end of a long hall. The kitchen is the perfection of cleanliness. There is no single speck of dust soaring in the sunlight, no fruit flies searching for a feast and no smell of wood long sodden with the smell of dairy that is typical of many kitchens of these days. As the voices get closer, there is a slight bang of metal against metal, a creek of a tiny voice. One of the lower cupboard doors opens and closes slightly with a quiet knock.
A large woman in her fifties enters a room, speaking loudly to someone behind her. She wears a simple green dress, her grayish blond hair is under a white cap and she is putting on an apron. She is followed by a young, slender woman, dressed in a similar way with a paper and a pencil in her hands.
She puts them down and starts removing cutting boards, knives, pots and pans. The older woman goes into the storage room and brings ham, parsley, coffee, and tea, jams, butter and cheese. Quick steps approach from the hall and another young woman in an apron enters with a basket containing eggs, milk and bread. After her, the fourth woman enters, tying her apron up behind her back.
The older woman frowns at the latter one and sighs out, impatiently gesturing her to the lower cupboards. She nods and puts her head in her shoulders** and hurries to one of the lower cupboards. As she opens the door and starts fishing there with her hand, she screams and jumps back, jogging*** one of the kitchen maids and making her drop the**** saucer with eggs she was battering.
Everyone freezes and looks at the two maids laying awkwardly on the floor. The older woman frowns and approaches the open cupboard with an expression of disbelief on her face. There, in the darkness, in between shiny copper pans, bowls and pots, surrounded by bits of apples, carrots and bread crumbles, lays a trembling, dirty boy of 8-10 years old, with wide eyes full of fear, and a stubborn mouth tightly shut.

* 'bang' refers to a noise made when being hit (like tolls), but is also used with clocks to count the number of times it has been hit. For example, 'the clock banged six times.' For a clock making a noise when it reaches a certain hour, you can use 'toll' or 'strike,' e.g. 'At that moment, the bell tolled one (o'clock)' or 'when the clock strikes twelve, I'll meet you in the kitchen.'

** Nice! I really like this description.

*** I'm not sure what you meant here, but I'm afraid 'jogging' doesn't make sense in this context.

**** 'The' should be used here instead of 'a,' as you're refering to a specific saucepan - the one with the eggs she's battering.

All in all, this is very good literary English! I'm very impressed. Well done. :)

Writing excercise ["No ideas, but in things "]  (title needs to be put in other words)

Write a brief story told only in images – concrete, simple, visually efficient movements and details. What people do, what objects they crave and caress rather than what they say or think about these objects and actions.
A bright sun fills the empty kitchen. A large, ancient clock the size of a man bangs(loudly strikes) six and (a) distant murmur of female voices slowly [arises] at the far end of a long hall. The kitchen is the [perfection] of cleanliness. There is no single speck of dust soaring (floating) in the sunlight, no fruit flies searching for (a) feast and no (wood that smells of) smell of (rancid milk) wood long sodden with dairy smell that is typical of many kitchens of these days. As the voices get closer, there is a slight bang of metal against metal, a (the creak) creek of a tiny [voice]. One of the lower cupboard doors opens and closes slightly with a quiet [knock].
[A large woman in her fifties enters a room, speaking loudly to someone behind her. She wears a simple green dress, her grayish blond hair under a white cap and she is putting on an apron.]   She is followed by a young, slender woman, dressed in a similar way with a paper and a pencil in her hands.
She puts them down and starts removing cutting boards, knives, pots and pans. The older woman goes into the storage room and brings (brings back or brings out) ham, parsley, coffee and tea, jams, butter and cheese. Quick steps approach from the hall and another young woman in an apron enters with a basket containing eggs, milk and bread. After her, the fourth woman enters, tying her apron up behind her back.
The older woman frowns at the [latter] one and sighs out, impatiently gesturing her to the lower cupboards. She nods and [puts her head in her shoulders] and hurries to one of the lower cupboards. As she opens the door and starts fishing (fishing in there) there with her hand, she screams and jumps back, [jogging](accidentally jostling) one of the kitchen maids and making (causing her to drop) her drop a saucer with eggs she was battering (beating).
Everyone freezes and looks at the two maids laying (lying) [awkwardly] on the floor. The older woman frowns and approaches the open cupboard with an expression of disbelief on her face. There, in the darkness, in between shiny copper pans, bowls and pots, surrounded by bits of apples, carrots and bread crumbles, lays (lay) a trebling,(trembling) [dirty] boy [of] 8-10 years old, with wide eyes full of fear, and (yet with) a stubborn mouth tightly shut.

Words (in parentheses) are my suggestions.  Words [in brackets] might said another way or rearranged for clarity.