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Discrimation at work Discrimation at work Equality between genders is an important, achievable and laudable goal. We should all strive to eradicate prejudice and discrimination in all its forms, especial sexism. People should all work together to make sure that everyone has the same opportunities and rights as everyone else. It must be explained that assignment of gender roles began with child-rearing in pre-industrial times. The mother of the child needed to be at home in order to breastfeed the child. The father, instead, did things outside the home. The introduction of farming created a stable food supply, and the father then was able to begin to amass wealth and property. The mother, meanwhile, was still in the home, and her work brought in no money. It is this income disparity that is the root of gender inequality issues. Though we are well past the day that this was our only option for dividing labour, old habits and old thinking die hard. It should be highlighted that women do not make statistically significant less than men when comparing apples to apples (e.g. amount of time at current position, strength of company, education and work history, etc.); however, they are often passed up for employment and promotions based on sexual discrimination. Who deserves the job should get the job and women can easily earn the position rather than needing it to be reserved for them. These days, women are starting to outperform men in many employment fields and hiring should be determined only by skills, certifications, or other such factors that are pertinent to the job in question. So, in conclusion, some day it would be very nice to have gender equality, but meanwhile we should be moving, towards a stance of true equality, which mean dealing with social and legal issues. All humans should be treated equal, regardless of age, race, gender, social status, religion, or ethnicity.

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I enjoyed reading your essay!  Not only was it a good read but I hope I can one day be as clear writing in my target languages as you are. Below are some minor corrections and suggestions.


Discrimination at work

Equality between genders is an important, achievable and laudable goal. We should all strive to eradicate prejudice and discrimination in all its forms, especial (especially) sexism. People should all work together to make sure that everyone has the same opportunities and rights as everyone else.
It must be explained that assignment of gender roles began with child-rearing in pre-industrial times. The mother of the child needed to be at home in order to breastfeed the child. The father, instead, did things outside the home. The introduction of farming created a stable food supply, and the father then was able to begin to amass wealth and property. The mother, meanwhile, was still in the home, (comma not needed) and her work brought in no money. It is this income disparity that is the root of gender inequality issues. Though we are well past the day that this was our only option for dividing labour, old habits and old thinking die hard. (hadnt thought of this before :-)
It should be highlighted that women do not make statistically significant less ("perform statistically less significantly" or "perform statistically significantly less".  *"Make" is not technically incorrect but "to make" usually implies "to earn" - at least in American usage.  This might be different in other parts of the world.  **significantly)  than men when comparing apples to apples (e.g. amount of time at current position, strength of company, education and work history, etc.); however, they are often passed up for employment and promotions based on sexual discrimination. Who deserves the job should get the job and women can easily earn the position rather than needing it to be reserved for them. (uncertain how this phrase fits into this particular paragraph) These days, women are starting to outperform men in many employment fields and hiring should be determined only by skills, certifications, or other such factors that are pertinent to the job in question.
So, in conclusion, some day it would be very nice to have gender equality, but meanwhile we should be moving, (comma unneeded) towards a stance of true equality, which mean (means) dealing with social and legal issues. All humans should be treated equal (equally), regardless of age, race, gender, social status, religion, or ethnicity.


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Discrimation at work

Discrimation at work

Equality between genders is an important, achievable and laudable goal. We should all strive to eradicate prejudice and discrimination in all its forms, especial sexism. People should all work together to make sure that everyone has the same opportunities and rights as everyone else.
It must be explained that assignment of gender roles began with child-rearing in pre-industrial times. The mother of the child needed to be at home in order to breastfeed the child. The father, instead, did things outside the home. The introduction of farming created a stable food supply, and the father then was able to begin to amass wealth and property. The mother, meanwhile, was still in the home, and her work brought in no money. It is this income disparity that is the root of gender inequality issues. Though we are well past the day that this was our only option for dividing labour, old habits and old thinking die hard.
It should be highlighted that women do not make statistically significant (1) less than men when comparing apples to apples (e.g. amount of time at current position, strength of company, education and work history, etc.); however, they are often passed up for employment and promotions based on sexual discrimination. Who deserves the job should get the job and women can easily earn the position rather than needing it to be reserved for them. These days, women are starting to outperform men in many employment fields and hiring should be determined only by skills, certifications, or other such factors that are pertinent to the job in question.
So, in conclusion, some day it would be very nice to have gender equality, but meanwhile we should be moving, towards a stance of true equality, which means dealing with social and legal issues. All humans should be treated equal, regardless of age, race, gender, social status, religion, or ethnicity.

(1) I believe this should be "statistically significantly".  Significantly would be the adverb which modifies the verb "make".  This is tough though because it sounds funny to have two adverbs in a row.

Otherwise, this is superb. ¡Espero hablar el español tan bien como hablas el ingles!


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