Advantage and disadvantage of gaming
Video games are very popular among young people because game is very interest and game has many advantage. On the other hand, video games are bad for teenagers’ eyes and some of them can not control themselves, so they play game for a long time. On the other hand, video games can help gamers to build logic and good habit and the most important reason is that gamers can let gamers feel relaxed after heavy work or study. From those two points, we can recognize if gamers control the time they spend in the game it is very nice for them.
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Advantages and disadvantages of gaming
Video games are very popular among young people because games are very interesting and games has many advantages. On one hand, video games are bad for teenagers’ eyes and some of them can not control themselves, so they play game for a long time. On the other hand, video games can help gamers to build logic and good habits and the most important reason is that gamers can let gamers feel relaxed after hard work or study. From these two points, hard ...this last one is hard to fix, So I gave up. Sorry v_v0
Joey, 1) my correction has a mistake: the correct structure is "On THE one hand..." 2) last sentence is not very clear. May be you consider to re-word it? Something like this: "We can judge whether games beneficial or not by player's ability to control the time spent in a game" 3) I'm learning Mandarin by the way. 朋友嗎 ^_^？
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