大家 好. 我帮助

我叫山富. 我有一个年中文学习. 我必须进展实现. 请帮助.
谢谢
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first of all。the article title:大家好，我需要你们的帮助

我名字叫山富，我学习中文已经有一年了，我必须取得更大的进步。请大家多多指教，谢谢！

tips：

“已经” in chinese mean is you have been finish .

“请大家多多指教” mean is you want to need help. better than   “请大家帮助我”（more polite)



hope your chinese get better:-)

大家 好. 我需要大家的帮助

我叫山富. 我有已经学习一个年中文了学习.但是我觉得进步缓慢， 我必须取得较大的进步展实现.所以 请大家帮助我.
谢谢！

Ps:Tell us how do you learn Chinese,then we can give you some suggestions.

大家 好. 我帮助(请帮助我, means "please help me.")

我叫山富. 我有一个年中文学习(我学习中文有一年了。In Chinese, you should put the phrases which tell places and time at the end of your sentences.). 我必须进展实现(我想要有更多进步。means "I want to learn more and develop myself."). 请帮助.
谢谢

(Hi, 山富！ You can write in this way which is better. See above!
BTW, I'm Julia who am learning English now, especially spoken English.
If you like, we cana talk more through Skype.
And, i've been a Chinese teacher in the Netherlands for a few months, and i hope such exprience could help you with your Chinese language learning!)

If you like, send me messages!

Julia