Water in the house
In the morning I decided to wash the porch everything was ok I put soap all over it and threw water with a little cup because I wanted to be careful but it was taking a lot of time so I decided to open the hose and do it faster and suddenly my broom was broken. I had to go for the other one but it was in the backyard and when I turned back the water was running into the house it was like a little river.
For that reason I didn`t have the chance to go for the broom and I couldn`t even close the hose I didn´t know what to do. Then I heard my dog yapping when I opened the door she was scared because the water was almost in her bedroom. Anyways, after 4 hours I was still drying everything up. It was funny but at the moment I was desperated.
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Water in the house
In the morning I decided to wash the porch. Everything was ok. I put sprinkled* soap all over it and threw poured water with a little cup because I wanted to be careful, but it was taking a lot of long time so I decided to open the hose and do it faster. and Suddenly I saw that my broom was broken. I had to go for get the other one, but it was in the backyard and when I turned back I saw that the water was running into the house! it was like a little river.For that reason I didn't have the chance to go for the broom and I couldn't even close the hose. I didn't know what to do. Then I heard my dog yapping. When I opened the door she was scared because the water was almost in her bedroom. Anyways, after 4 hours I was still drying everything up. It was funny but at the moment I was devastated desperated.
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Natalia: OH NOoooooo your poor puppy :( What a great but also upsetting story.
Most of my edits have to do with adding punctuation. English loves short sentences and lots of commas!
Sprinkled: Put is a strange verb here, I would use one more specific to the type of soap. If it's powder, I'd say "sprinkled." If it's liquid, maybe "sprayed" or "poured" (or sprinkled could work too).
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