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A Two million dollars Dust Particle In Texas is located an Astronomic laboratory belonged to the NASA dedicated to study meteorics, to figure out what they are made of. In order to collect physical samples, the researchment program, which is run by NASA scientifics, involves sophisticated laboratories on earth, a complex university coworking network and, which is more amazing, an special aircratf to get traces of meteorics on the outside space. This plane is an old spy one slimming down a scientist tools. It works like a fishing net or a strainer, loooking for really small dust particules. In the best, it would be get two or three ones. In fact, it is considered as a huge success by the investigators. The lump sum of the program is over 3 or 4 $million dollars in round. So, you can find that each particules costs almost a million. Is it worth spending such a atonishing amount of money? In my opinion, it is, because these reachments will provide us with very useful information in the large run, and new technologic based on they. Besides, all the human beings should be greatful that United States does it.
27 ส.ค. 2016 เวลา 19:33
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A Two Million Dollar Dust Particle

There is an astronomic laboratory located in Texas and belonging to the NASA dedicated to the study of meteoritics, to figure out what they meteorites are made of. In order to collect physical samples, the research program, which is run by NASA scientific, utilizes sophisticated laboratories on earth, a complex university collaboration network and, which is more amazingly, a special aircraft to detect traces of meteorites on the outside in space. This plane is an old spy vehicle refitted with specialized equipment. It works like a fishing net or a strainer, loooking for really small dust particles. At best, it only collects two or three ones. This, in fact, is considered as a huge success by the researchers. The total cost of the program is over 3 or 4 million dollars in round. So, you can find that Each particle, therefore, costs almost a million dollars. Is it worth spending such an astonishing amount of money? It is, in my opinion, because this research will provide us with very useful information in the long run, as well as new technologies based on it. Besides, all the human beings should be grateful that the United States does it.


Great job!  I made most of my changes to unify the tone of the essay.  You switch between a casual and formal style, so many suggestions are different word choices to make the writing more cohesive.  This was a very interesting essay.  If you have any questions, don't hesitate to ask!

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