Essay about the wildflife
This is a writing practice. I've been ask to do an essay about a topic. I'd apreciate if someone help me to correct it.
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TOPIC: Not enough is being done to protect endangered animals. Do you agree?
In order to answer this question, I need to consider some facts, like how many animals are under threat and why we should protect them.
First of all, it is important to indicate the huge variety of animal species that are under threat, like many breeds of tigers, monkeys, elephants or snakes. The main reason why the wildlife is being threatened, is because the look atractive, in one way or another, for the people, who want to get their skin, eat them or use any other part of their body to make clothes or as a decoration object.
In this way, every living being is unique and humans must avoid their extinction. People has the chance to killing endangered animals. But hunting is not the only guilty, a many animals are dying because their enviroment is being destroyed, such as polar beard, who their home is getting worse because of global warming.
To sum up, I consider that we need to stop this situation. For this reason, more international laws limiting hunting and the destruction of the enviroment, as well as to stop the global warming, must be approved, in my opinion.
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Essay about the wildlife
This is a writing practice. I've been asked to do an essay about a topic. I'd appreciate if someone help me to correct it.---
TOPIC: Not enough is being done to protect endangered animals. Do you agree?
In order to answer this question, I need to consider some facts, like how many animals are under threat and why we should protect them.
First of all, it is important to indicate [better words might be: understand, identify] the huge variety of animal species that are under threat, like many breeds of tigers, monkeys, elephants or snakes. The main reason why the wildlife is being threatened, is because that they look attractive, in one way or another, for the people, who want to get their skins, eat them, or use any other parts of their bodies to make clothes or as a decoration decorative objects.
In this way, every living being is unique and humans must avoid their extinction. People has have the chance to kill endangered animals. But hunting is not the only it is no only hunters who are guilty, as many animals are dying because their environment is being destroyed, such as polar bears who their whose home is getting worse because of global warming.
To sum up, I consider think that we need to stop this situation. For this reason, more international laws limiting hunting and the destruction of the environment, as well as to stop the stopping global warming, must be approved, in my opinion.
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