Furthermore, when we traveling travel to the a new country, we will learn their language, which is another benefit of travelling to foreign countries. In contrast to, traveling in our own country won’t teach us new languages. Even though there are too many classes for learning foreign language, they won’t be more effective than going to the country where they talk in that language. Therefore, it is a kind of activity for our brain. When it gets more practice, our productivity increases. Moreover, we can find new friends and talk with them, which is really nice. By communicate communicating with other people, we can teach learn something new from each other, and it’s really useful.
In conclusion, I would like to emphasize that travelling in a new country is much better and interesting than our own countries country. In this case we will learn so many new things, and our worldview will increase. Whereas, we cannot reach these goals in our countries country. Actually, culture, customs, language and etc. are the same in one country. So if you would like to open discover new things for yourself and learn something new, just travel to other country countries instead of yours and enjoy special moments.

TOEFL Independent Writing

If we want to improve (wide/expand/broad/span) our knowledge and worldview, traveling to the a foreign country  will just help us. The issue stated by the topic - There are not an issue stated in the topic. It's purely a question about your personal opnion - is whether or not people get more benefit by travelling in their own country that foreign countries. This is a very important issue because only by travelling to the other countries we can improve our knowledge about culture and new customs from that country. However, I believe that travelling to the new countries is much beneficial than do that in own country. 

By visiting new counties, we can find new interesting things such as new customs and cultures etc. As a result, it’s possible to improve our world view.(use whereas to contrast two different ideas. To express concession you should use although, though or while ) Whereas Although/While, travelling to  other cities in our own country (is easier and comfortable), we won’t find any new cultures or customs. For instance, I remember I was reading about culture in China several years ago, and when I was travelling to China last summer, I was in surprised. Actually, what I read and saw was completely different. So I had decided  realised, if I want to know more about the a country/ China, I just should visit it. Therefore, we could say travelling to other country is much interesting than ours.

Furthermore, when we travelling to the new country, we will learn their language, which is another benefit of travelling to foreign countries. In contrast to, our own country won’t teach us new languages. Even though there are too many classes schools for learning foreign languages, they won’t be more effective than going to the country that holds the language as their mother tongue where they talk in that language. Therefore, it is a kind of activity for our brain. When it gets more practice, our productivity increase. Moreover, we can find new friends and talk with them, which is really nice. By communicate with other people, we can teach something new from each other and it’s really useful.

In conclusion, I would like to emphasize that travelling in new country is much better and interesting than our own countries. In this case we will learn so many new and our worldview increase. Whereas, we cannot reach these goals in our countries. Actually, culture, customs, language and etc. are the same in one country. So if you would like to open new things for yourself and learn something new, just travel to other country instead of yours and enjoy moments.

Use transitional words wisely otherwise they will subtract it from your final score. 

There are several components that you should follow in order to write a good essay. I did the TOEFL test recently and I know how intricate it is. I suggest you to read some books related with the TOEFL test. I strong recommend Cambridge Preparation for the TOEFL Test, Delta Key to the TOEFL Test, Academic Vocabulary in Use and Essential Words for the Toefl, I read all them. If you want to get a high score in the Toefl, these books are essencial (of course there are other books, but these are the ones I like the most ).