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Please help me correct it. Thank you. In my opinion I didn't completely agree with the idea that having money is the key to happiness. The money is very important for life. How can you buy food, clothes or other necessaries. Almost expenditure such as electric bill, water bill is paid by money. More money you can earn, easier and more sufficient your life is. For example if you have lots of money, you can buy a beautiful house and take care of your children and support financial for your children better. Besides, money can save one’s life. There are some poor people especially in developing countries must live with the hurt of disease or die because they do not have enough money to cure. Although money brings many advantages for human life, money is not all and doesn’t bring happiness to people if people don’t use it effectively. Even if some people earn much money, they still feel upset and boring. The things those people need is spending time with their family or they need few friend to stay closely and share something or doing something else. For me, there are amount of other factors can make people happier than money such as family, social relationships, social activities, play sports, doing charity or carring out investment, ect,… In conclusion, I think money don’t make people happy. How people use it to gain their desire or help someone creates happiness and happiness or not is depend on everyone’s opinion.

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Please help me correct it. Thank you.

In my opinion, I don't completely agree with the idea that having money is the key to happiness.
Money is very important for life. How can you buy food, clothes or other necessaries ?. Almost every expenditure such as electricity bill, water bill is paid with money.The More money you can earn,The easier and  sufficient your life will be. For example if you have a lot of money, you can buy a beautiful house and take care of your children and support financial for your children better. Besides, money can save one’s life. There are some poor people especially in developing countries must live with the hurt of disease or die because they do not have enough money to get treatements.
Although money brings many advantages for human life, money is not everything and doesn’t bring happiness to people if people don’t use it effectively. Even if some people earn much money, they still feel upset and boring. The things those people need is spending time with their families or they need few friends to stay closely and share something or do something else. For me, there are amount of other factors can make people happier than money such as family, social relationships, social activities, play sports, doing charity or carring out investments, etc,…
In conclusion, I think money don’t make people happy. How people use it to gain their desire or help someone creates happiness and happiness or not is depend on everyone’s opinion.

Ps : I am not sure what you meant by the last sentence.

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