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MichelleYu
TOEFL Writing Practice II Question: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The rules that the whole society today expect young people to follow are too strict? Answer: I agree the statement that the rules which the whole society today expects young people to follow are too strict. We can discuss this issue in several aspects. For instance, the society and the culture are changed due to the technology improvement, and the young people are forced to adapt themselves into the new technological world and meanwhile into the traditional concepts. For example, the reading behavior alters thanks to the smartphones, and we need to acquire latest news in a short time to deal with our social circle. Therefore, people now are accustomed to have a quick look on the website instead of reading a hard copy book deeply. However, people in the last generation think that the young generation should learn the knowledge more deeply and also more widely. Besides, we are facing globalization and the competition in this generation becomes fierce. The whole society puts too much emphasis on the results, which the young generation makes, like international competition, the international reputation of a new local brand, and etc. Nevertheless, when they compare these results made by the young generation with the outcome the old generation made, they usually forget to put the nowadays fierce competition in to account. Hence, they urge the young generation to have better performance than they used to have. To sum up, no matter which generation we are, we should always put ourselves in others’ shoes to be a considerate people. Young generation and old generation are in different time condition, so don’t expect them obey the tradition and create a new page at the same time.
19 ก.พ. 2017 เวลา 15:44
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To sum up, In conclusion, no matter which generation we are, we should always put ourselves in others’ shoes to be a of other considerate people. The Young younger generation and old older generation are in different time condition, live in a different age, so don’t do not expect them to obey the tradition and create a new page at the same time.

红色的不是很明白。写得还可以。如果改这篇作文的老师是老一派的,那就有点讽刺。

20 กุมภาพันธ์ 2017

I agree the with statement that the rules which the whole society today expects young people to follow are too strict. We can discuss this issue in several aspects. For instance, the society and the culture are had changed due to the technology improvement technological advancements, and the young people are forced to adapt themselves into the in this new technological world and meanwhile into the traditional concepts. 


For example, the reading behavior had alters changed thanks due to the smartphones, and as we need to acquire the latest news in a short time to deal interact with our social circle. Therefore, people now are accustomed to have a quick look on the website instead of reading a hard copy book deeply. searching for information online rather than taking the time reading books. However, people in the last generation The older generation think that the young younger generation should learn acquire the knowledge more deeply and also more widely. using the traditional way, which is by reading books.

Besides, we We are facing globalization and the competition in this among the younger generation had become fierce. The whole society puts too much emphasis on the creating results, which the young generation makes, like international competition, the international reputation of a new local brand, and etc. Nevertheless, when they compare these the results made by the young generation with the outcome the old generation made,  between the young and old, they usually forget to put the nowadays fierce competition in to account. take into account the fierce competition going on between the younger generation of people. Hence, they urge the young generation to have better performance than they used to have. With this in mind, the older generation expects more from the younger generation.


20 กุมภาพันธ์ 2017
Ching Yew Keun 你可以把你讀不懂的句子畫顏色,然後我看看怎麼翻中文,畢竟我希望不是一昧的中翻英。謝謝你的幫助[emoji][emoji][emoji][emoji]
19 กุมภาพันธ์ 2017
可以也写中文吗?比较容易纠正你要表达的意识。 Edit 1: 没关系。我尽力纠正。
19 กุมภาพันธ์ 2017
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