Clean Up My Room
I cleaned up my room. Then, I found a hat. It was given to me at the countdown ceremony held at "Times Square" in 2017.
Almost one and a half years have passed since I visited New York. Time flew so fast!
If I have a chance, I'd like to visit New York again.
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Clean Up My Room
I cleaned up my room,and Then, I found a hat. It was given to me at the countdown ceremony held in Times Square in 2017.Almost one and a half years have passed since I visited New York. Time flew so fast!
If I have a chance, I'd like to visit New York again.
-----Your paragraph was good, but if you want it to sound more natural you can say this:
I was cleaning up my room and found a hat. It was given to me at the Times Square countdown ceremony in 2017.
It has been almost a year and a half (or you can say one and a half years) since I've visited New York. Time flew so fast!
If I have the chance, I'd like to visit New York again.
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Cleaning My Room
Almost one and a half years have passed since I've visited New York. Time flew by so quickly!
If I got a chance, I'd visit New York again.
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Emily, thank you for your comment!
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Not really any true errors but Kyana's suggestions to make it more natural are good. I guess we would say "in Times Square" or "at the Times square celebration" and we would not put "Times Square" in quotation marks.
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