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Let's write an IELTS essay #1 ---Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child’s development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion.--- In recent decades, throughout the world many parents have chosen to have their children to be taught at home, albeit at a cost in the children's social life. While traditionalists claim that social development of the children will suffer greatly if parents choose to teach them at home, more liberal minded people defend the idea that every child is unique in his abilities and accordingly he should be taught in a unique way. In this essay, I will explain why education at home is more effective than the traditional education at school. To begin with, efficiency of conventional schools is very low. This is because, almost all schools teach in the same way, while abilities of children widely vary; some children have difficulties in learning, some of them are extraordinarily intelligent. For example, one child might be very talented in languages, and he has the ability to learn several languages. However, most of the schools do not have the means to teach several languages. To give another example, schools generally do not have special programs for children with learning disabilities. Therefore, it is to be expected that not every child is suitable to be taught at school. Secondly, the social life at school often times does not pose an advantage. Reason for this is that in some of the neighborhoods with a low socio-cultural level and a poor economic development, children affect each other in a negative way. For instance, some children bully other children or some older children commit sexual crimes on other children. Consequently, it is to be expected that at such schools, children would be in danger to be harmed thus, social life at school is not always a positive factor in development of a child. In conclusion, I strongly agree with the notion that education at home is more benefical for children, since every child could be educated according to his talents and abilities that way. Also, in some of the cases that type of education is essential to protect the child. In the future, there might be a hybrid education system that would make use of the best sides of the conventional education and education at home.

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In recent decades, throughout the world, many parents have chosen to have their children to be taught at home, albeit at a cost in the children's social life. While traditionalists claim that the social development of the children will suffer greatly if parents choose to teach them at home, more liberal minded people defend the idea that every child is unique in his abilities and accordingly should be taught in a (suitable) way. I'm inclined to believe that) education at home is more effective than the traditional education at school. A fair comparison is listed below.


To begin with, efficiency of conventional schools is  (drastically) low. This is because, almost all schools teach in the same way, while the abilities of children vary widely. Some children have difficulties in learning, while others are extraordinarily intelligent. For example, one child might be very talented in languages, and he has the ability to learn several languages. Nevertheless is not provided with the sufficient studying material, due to a lack in the schools' supplies, and is therefore presumed below average. To make matters worse, schools  are not generally equipped with special programs for (targeting) children with learning disabilities. Therefore, it is to be expected that not every child is a suitable candidate to be taught at such schools. 


(Furthermore), the social life at school (often/sometimes) does not pose as an advantage. (A/The) reason for this is that in some of the neighborhoods with a low socio-cultural level and a poor economic development, children tend to affect each other in a negative (an obstructive) way. For instance, some children may bully each other children or while some young adults may commit sexual crimes on with other children. Consequently, it is to be expected that in such schools, children would be in danger, and may be verbally or physically abused. to be harmed Thus, social life at school is not always considered as a positive factor in the development of a child.

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