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Please help me correct my composition. thank you very much Steve Jobs Iphone come into china in 2009, up to now, iphone has been sold in chinese market about 10 years. Iphone’ s market share getting smaller and smaller, and has reduced to fifth place in china . However, the iphonexs still attracts a lot of college students attention in this week. The iphonexs is sold in china on this Thursday. Ihpone has many fans not only can it give good experience but also it has an excellent leader. As we all know that there are legendary character in Apple’s history----Steve Jobs. Steve jobs has the experience in different from other successful entrepreneur. He even didn’t finish his college course. Because of his different experience, people regard him as idol. But, what made him become an excellent person. I conclude that there are there are three things he had, confidence innovation and patience. First of all, Steve jobs is a confident person, the confidence even look like delicate. He is able to persuade everyone to accept his expectation is right. From apple1 to apple111, he always proposed so many challenge tasks in the process of making apple1. No matter they say what, he can make use of his confidence to inspire others’ confidence to the task. When he had to leave the APPLE company, he choose to resign. What more, he set up a new company quickly. He held the belief that animation industry is the best chosen. Finally, he made it. Secondly, the reason why he could propose subversive concept in the phone is the he had the full of innovation. Steve Jobs had keen art sense, which propel the ihpone to be well received in people. He said that We're here to put a dent in the universe. Otherwise why else even be here? He never gave up changing the world, and he also said that innovation distinguishes between a leader and a follower. Therefore, he became the leader. Thirdly, the patience is one of the best characters. He set up the APPLE when he was 21-year-old, left APPLE at 30-year-old, and came back to APPLE at 42-year-old. Whenever he was, whatever he did. He always made a great patient to finish it. In addition, he had the greatest patience on his product, which just liked the father look after his children. In a word, the success of a leader must be the consist of lots of excellent characters, and the trait come from his conception of world, his experience and the outlook on life. Finally, I look forward to everyone can do like that the Steve Jobs said that Stay Hungry , Stay Foolish.

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Steve Jobs' invention,Iphone was newly introduced to china in 2009.Till now, Iphone has been selling in the chinese market for about 10 years. Iphone’ s market share is reducing rapidly, and has reduced to fifth place in china . However, the Iphone XS still attracts a lot of college students attention when it is released.

Iphone XS is released in china this Thursday. Apple has many fans not only can it give good experience but also it has an excellent leader. As we all know that there are legendary character in Apple’s history----Steve Jobs.

Steve jobs has experiences that differs him from other successful entrepreneur. He did not manage to complete his college course. Due to his difference , people regard him as an idol.

I conclude that there are three traits that he had, confidence, innovation and patience.

Steve jobs is a confident person, as he is able to persuade everyone that his believe is right. From apple1 to apple111, he proposed so many challenge tasks in the process of making apple1. No matter what others said, he is always confident to inspire others to be confident in what they are doing.

When he had to leave the Apple company, he chose to resign. Right after leaving Apple, he set up a new company . He had the belief that animation industry was the best. In the end, he succeed.

The main reason why he could propose subversive concept in the phone was due to the innovative mindset that he had. He said that we are here to put a dent in the universe. Otherwise, why be here? He never give up changing the world.He said that innovation distinguishes between a leader and a follower. Thus, he became the leader.

Patience was one of his best traits. He set up Apple when he was 21-year-old,left Apple at 30 and came back to APPLE at 42-year-old. Wherever he was, whatever he does,he always perservered on.

In a nutshell, the success of a leader includes excellent characters, the postive perception that they can change the world and also, their experiences.

Stay Hungry , Stay Foolish. - Steve Jobs

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