Would anyone correct my writing? Dear Justin, You will be surprised, but I have finally started working as a sales representative. I found the announcement on the Internet. The salary seems to be dec

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Michał

Would anyone correct my writing? Dear Justin, You will be surprised, but I have finally started working as a sales representative. I found the announcement on the Internet. The salary seems to be decent, and additionally, after my first 90 days they will give me an extra 50 cents. My new office is great. It is spacious, bright, comfortable and fully furnished. The break room is stacked with snacks at all times. In my new job, I will be responsible for acquisition of new clients and retention current ones with presenting and selling company products. If I make the best results, I will be permitted to prepare company actions plans and schedules, so I'm going to pull my weight. Wish me good luck. Best wishes Michał

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Dear Justin, You will be surprised, but I have finally started working as a sales representative. I found the announcement on the Internet. The salary seems to be decent, and additionally, after my first 90 days they will give me an extra 50 cents. My new office is great. It is spacious, bright, comfortable and fully furnished. The break room is stacked with snacks at all times. In my new job, I will be responsible for the acquisition of new clients and ,retention of current ones and presenting and selling company products. If I make the best results do well I will be permitted to prepare company actions plans and schedules, so I'm going to pull my weight. Wish me good luck. Best wishes Michał

Really well written and very natural sounding with just a couple of minor errors and slips in parlance ( eg we tend to say "wish me luck" rather than "wish me good luck" ) but this is fairly inconsequential and wouldnt sound terribly out of place. Overall a well written notebook entry

Claudia

Hi Michal

Hereby the correction of your notebook entry.

Congratulations!

Regards

Karen

Would anyone correct my writing?

Dear Justin,

You will be surprised, but I have finally started working / to work as a sales representative. I found the announcement on the internet / Internet. The salary seems to be decent, and, additionally, after my first 90 days they will pay me an extra 50 cents per hour. My new office is great. It is spacious, bright, comfortable and fully furnished. The break room is stacked with snacks at all times. In my new job, I will be responsible for the acquisition of new clients and the retention of our current clientele by presenting and selling company products. If I make / obtain the best results, I'll have the opportunity to prepare business actions plans and schedules, so I'm going to pull my weight. Wish me good luck.

Best wishes
Michał

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