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First notebook entry: Introducing myself I am Asch. My hometown is a small village by the river in the south of China, but now I'm a Beijinger.By prefession, I am a writer. I love reading and writing when I was a young boy.I am also fond of fishing , swimming, and music...but my dream is writing some really great poems and novels(and some short stories).Now we have a community art space in Haidian District, It's an artist studio and a public space for communication. It's an art education tube,a communtiy library and a chlidren's art gallery.Welcome to visit us:)

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First notebook entry: Introducing myself

I am Asch. My hometown is a small village by the river in the south of China, but now I'm a Beijinger.  By prefession, I am a writer.  I love reading and writing when I was a young boy. I am also fond of fishing , swimming1 , and music...but My dream is to write  writing some really great poems and novels (and some short stories).  Now we have a The community art space in Haidian District, It's is also an artist studio,  and a public space area for communication, .  It's an art education center tube???, a communtiy library and a chlidren's art gallery. Welcome to and visit us:)

1.  Don't put any comma in front of conjunctions such as "and".  In your case, redundant.  Since you are a writer by profession, here's the link to the controversy of the "Oxford comma".  http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Serial_comma and see how you should use or not to use in those examples stated.

Your punctuation indentation is all messed up.

http://www.italki.com/knowledge/page/Mechanics%20Of%20The%20English%20Language.htm

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A Short  Self-introduction

I am Asch. My hometown is in the south of China,but now I live in Beijing with my family.I was a cartoon writer for many years. It was an awful job, I think.I fell for reading and writing when I was a young boy.My dream is to write great poems,novels and short stories.

This year my wife and I  have just created  a community art space in Haidian District .It is a non-profit organization.It is also an artist studio,a public space for communication,an art education lab,a community library and a chlidren's art gallery.Welcome and visit us! You can share your stories,your knowledge, your inspirations with many friends .

Blog: www.treedweller.org

 

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