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buddies, this is my essay for ielts test, please give me a hand. thank you all guys. ^_^ Question: Air transport is increasingly used to export fruits and vegetables to countries where they cannot be grown or are out of season. Some people say this is a good thing while other people think it cannot be justified. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. The issue of whether exporting fruits and vegetables by airlines is beneficial has sparked off an intense debate. Some people hold that exporting food benefits people in either exporting countries or importing countries, while others claim that it poses a threat to the environment. I personally believe that people would benefit from it if only the fruits and vegetables are transmitted by airlines with environmental-friendly fuel. It is widely believed that exporting business has a positive impact on both exporting countries and importing countries. On the one hand, for exporting countries, it not only expands the farm food market but also increases the income of farmers and their own country. As we can/all see, recent years have witnessed a growing trend in sales of exporting food. On the other hand, for importing countries, it is undeniable that having a variety of food that is out of season is conducive to balancing maintaining a healthy and nutrient diet. Nevertheless, it is also a widespread awareness that excessive uses of air transport is are detrimental to environment especially the air condition/have its inherent disadvantages. To begin with, excessive emitting of carbon dioxide released by airplane may lead to global warming, an extremely serious problem harassing the world. What is more, the detrimental gases released from aircraft such as sulfur dioxide also pose a threat to human. As far as I am concerned, it is of paramount significance/top priority for governments and scientists to seek renewable resources to replace fuels that is are hazardous to the earth. Only in this way, people can constantly benefit from exporting fruits and vegetables by means of aircraft.

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Question: Air transport is increasingly used to export fruits and vegetables to countries where they cannot be grown or are out of season. Some people say this is a good thing while other people think it cannot be justified. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. The issue of whether exporting fruits and vegetables by airlines is beneficial has sparked off an intense debate. Some people hold believe that exporting food benefits people in either exporting countries or importing countries, while others claim that it poses a threat to the environment. I personally believe that people would benefit from it if only the fruits and vegetables are transmitted by airlines with environmental-friendly fuel. It is widely believed that the exporting business has a positive impact on both exporting countries and importing countries. On the one hand, for exporting countries, it not only expands the farm food agricultural market but also increases the income of farmers and their own country. As we can/all see, recent years have witnessed a growing trend in sales of exporting food. On the other hand, for importing countries, it is undeniable that having a variety of food that is out of season is conducive to balancing and maintaining a healthy and nutrient rich diet. Nevertheless, it there is also a widespread awareness that excessive use of air transport is are detrimental to the environment, especially the air/condition/have its inherent disadvantages(I am unsure as to what you meant to say here). To begin with, excessive emitting of carbon dioxide released by airplanes may lead contribute to global warming, an extremely serious problem harassing affecting the world today. What is more Furthermore, the detrimental gases released from aircrafts such as sulfur dioxide also pose a threat to humans. As far as I am concerned, it is of paramou significance/top priority for governments and scientists to seek renewable resources to replace fuels that is are hazardous to the earth. Only in this way, people can constantly benefit from exporting fruits and vegetables by means of aircraft.
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thank you so much for you appraisal!
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This is very good! Your English is great! This is my first time correcting on this site so I do hope it's okay for you. Any issues, please feel free to comment or send a message. :)
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help!

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