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Please correct my writing: Take 1 IELTS writing The line chart shows figures about the area of land that was harvested between 1950 and 1996 in million hectares. In the broadest sense, that has been overall increase in the numbers from just below 600 million hectares at the begging of the time frame, to reach 700 by the in of the end of the period, in 1996. The figures started with sharp increase during the very first six years from 600 to 650 million hectares per year, then the figure fluctuate below then around that number, 650 million hectares, over the next decade. Then in the mid sixty's, the figures were increase to reach above 700 million hectares in year 1977. Then after small decrease in the numbers, the trend peaked about 745 million hectares in year 1980. Moving forward, the area of land harvested grain show a sharp decrease then plateaued around the 700 million hectares until the end of the time frame- 1969.

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Please correct my writing: Take 1 IELTS Writing

This line chart shows figures about the area of land that was harvested between 1950 and 1996. It is in millions of hectares.

In the broadest sense, there has been an overall increase in the numbers from just below 600 million hectares at the beginning of the time frame, to reach 700 million hectares by the end of this period in 1996.


The figures started with a sharp increase during the very first six years from 600 to 650 million hectares per year.  Then the figures fluctuate below this number and move to around  650 million hectares for the next decade.  In the mid sixty's, the figures were increased to reach above 700 million hectares right up until the year 1977. Then after a small decrease in the numbers, the trend peaked at about 745 million hectares in the year 1980.

Moving forward, the area of land harvesting grain shows a sharp decrease then plateaus at around  700 million hectares until the end of the time frame in 1969. (Did you mean 1996?)

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Well done. You have good english. I have just made a few minor corrections.

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