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Essay #478 "Luck and Success" 10.05.19 Often people succeed in their lives only because of the amount of effort they have put in, however, other, especially people who fail in their goals or not determined enough to follow their dreams believe that the great part of it is plain luck. In my opinion, this is possible, but on a decent distance luck cannot buy people all they want. First of all, people have to understand that even the most basic things in which they want to succeed require effort. Most activities need constant practice and the improvement of skills, only this way will it be possible to ensure the development in a chosen sphere. Especially this is clearly seen in sport as sportsmen should maintain the level of their performances for a long time, which definitely has nothing to do with luck. Another point is that event the spheres in which luck can have a highly positive effect on people’s activities, like business, in order to maintain their upperhand which they have gained by luck people have to try very very hard. Only by combining luck and hard work will it be possible to save the beneficial effect which they get accidentally. However, on a long run it is almost impossible to distinguish luck and professional sense. Finally, no one should rely entirely on luck, as this is something that cannot be controlled and people without developing their skills and knowledge base would have a hard time with the growing in their chosen sphere. This should be taught from primary schools in order to instill in children love for education and make them avoid cheating as this would have absolutely detrimental effect on them. To conclude, in spite of the fact that many people prefer to see the success of others as a plain luck, often this is not true. All people have to work for their success and even if we do not like some successful people personally, they should be given credits for their hard work. Even with luck people have to work really really hard in order to maintain the level of their success and develop it further.

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Often people succeed in their lives only because of the amount of effort they have put in; however, others, especially people who fail in their goals or are not determined enough to follow their dreams, believe that the great part of it is plain luck.

In my opinion, this is possible, but on a decent distance for the most part luck cannot buy get people all they want. First of all, people have to understand that even the most basic things in which they want to succeed require effort. Most activities need constant practice and the improvement of skills, only this way will it be possible to ensure the development in a chosen sphere. Especially This is clearly seen in sports as sportsmen athletes should must maintain the level of their performances for a long time, which definitely has nothing to do with luck. Another point is that event the spheres in which luck can have a highly positive effect on people’s activities, like business, in order to maintain their the upperhand which they have gained by luck, people have to try very very hard. Only by combining luck and hard work will it be possible to save maintain the beneficial effect benefit which that they get received accidentally. However, on a in the long run it is almost impossible to distinguish luck and professional sense.

Finally, no one should rely entirely on luck, as this is something that cannot be controlled and people without developing a person who does not develop their skills and knowledge base would will have a hard time with the growing in their chosen sphere. This should be taught from beginning in primary schools, in order to instill in children a love for education and make them to avoid cheating, as this would have absolutely detrimental effect on them.

To conclude, in spite of the fact that many people prefer to see the success of others as a plain luck, often this is not true. All people have to work for their success and even if we do not like some successful people personally, they should be given credits for their hard work. Even with luck people have to work really really hard in order to maintain the level of their success and develop it further.

Comment: good job! Note that "on a decent distance" is not a common or natural phrase in English. I substituted "for the most part," which i hope preserves your original meaning. Also, "in the long run" is a fixed phrase in English. Last, in spoken English it is common to repeat words like "very" or "really" for emphasis, but this is too casual in a written essay for school, work, etc.

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