Can someone help me mark my IELTS writing, thanks a lot! Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children). The idea of listing the unpaid community service as a compulsory part of high school curriculum has been vigorously advocated recently. Authority as well as many parents believed that voluntary work greatly contributes to students’ holistic development. I, however, to a large extent disagree with this new approach. Delivering community service is a very practical way for adolescents to learn soft skills. It provides a platform to practice and improve their self-expression, interpersonal skills, problem-solving skills and leaderships through working with a group of people towards goal-orientated tasks. These activities also broader adolescents’ horizons as they will be aware of a variety of social issues and encounter those in needed, especially for those who may otherwise not concerned about their surroundings if the program is not compulsory. Furthermore, when high school students are capable of contributing their value to others, they find their meaning and it helps grow their confidence and self esteem. What is more important? It enriches students’ resumes and increases their competitive advantages for enrolling particular courses in the university. However, I do not think that forcing high school students to volunteer their time for public service could have large impact on their learning. Students are less likely to be motivated to work when they are not paid. Also, these voluntary programs normally set in a very short session and may give students very limited range of work and responsibility, which may lead to undesirable outcomes rather than the advantages mentioned above. Instead, it would be wiser to allocate those restricted time to better equip their final public exam in that tight school syllabus, so that they can achieve a better academic performance with less stress and nail the course they want in the university. In conclusion, there may be few advantages of compulsory social service programs, I believe in reality they are less achievable and could be time-consuming. Thus, I disagree with this new reform in high school.

IELTS WRITING ABOUT EARLY LANGUAGE LEARNING Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? Learning a foreign language nowadays has been widespread around the globe. Although there are some drawbacks putting foreign language into primary school curriculum, I personally believe that children should be exposed to foreign language as young as possible rather than until secondary school. Acquiring a new language during primary school can be less effective, as pre-schoolers have many other essential skills to learn than a foreign language for their emotional, physical and intellectual development. For instance, learning how to regulate their emotion, interact cooperatively with peers, expressing themselves as well as basic knowledge and moral value. Some pupils may not even manage to read, write and speak efficiently in their first language. New language can be a great obstacle for them. With less teaching resources and school funding, primary students may have much less motivation and interest to learn another language. However, I do believe the benefit of early language learning outweighs disadvantages. Studies have showed young children are capable of learning various language at a time without interfering with each other. They are better imitator. They can master foreign accents, new vocabulary and sentences structures far better than adolescents. Furthermore, pupils are great subjects to learn languages, as they are more open and talkative than teenagers. They are less worried about making language mistakes while speaking to foreigners, which allows quick learning improvement. The younger they grasp the language, the more opportunity and time they have to practice and the more creative they can be with its usage. In conclusion, children should start learning a second language at primary school as the advantages exceed its disadvantages.

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“Young people spend their free time in shopping malls. This has negative effects on young people and society”. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

It is understandable that young adolescents spending their leisure time in the shopping centres can have adverse effects on them. The fashionable boutiques often promote many chic and opulent clothing; chain stores like JBHI love selling the latest upmarket gadgets. Being surrounded by these tempting products, young adult may be lured to invest huge amount of money in some unnecessary luxurious items, either by debt cards or through other immoral measures such as compensated dating, finding a ‘super daddy’ or drug trafficcaking. This may not only hinder their study, damage their physical and psychological health and bright future, but more importantly increase social crime rates. Nevertheless, to a large extent, I disagree with the statement. With more education and proper parental guidance, I do believe most of the teenagers would not fall into this shopaholic trap. Rather, these inquisitive people might gain lots of rewarding experience by looking around cosmopolitan shops. They might expand their horizon through learning the most up-to-date technology and fashion or other cultures. They might become more prudent and competent in getting the best deal and in saving up more money. They might become more sociable and out-going. Not only because they have lots of opportunities to interact with the salesperson and other customers, but also because shopping mall is a great place for a bunch of individuals to hang around and create fun. What is more important? The shopkeeper in those restaurants, supermarkets, cinemas, and other retail stores will benefit from it. The small spending of this large population can greatly stimulate the local economy. In conclusion, I believe teenagers shopping in the plazas can benefit themselves as well as the social economy.

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IELTS writing about how patient's mental attitude can affect the effectiveness of treatment A number of different medical traditions are now widely known and used: Western medicine (using drugs and surgery), herbal medicine, acupuncture (using needles at certain points of the body), homoeopathy (using minute doses of poisons), and so on. How important is the patient’s mental attitude towards his/her treatment in determining the effectiveness of the treatment? These days, complimentary therapies such as herbal medicine, acupuncture and homoeopathy have become increasingly popular in our society in addition to conventional medical treatment. Some claimed that these treatments are more useful than the conventional services, other pointed out that the therapy produced no effect at all. In this article, we will discuss how patient’s mental attitude can influence their determination of the effectiveness of the treatment. I believe that the subjective view of the customers can be highly associated with placebo effect and the actual benefit can be very small. Most of the complimentary therapies can improve patients’ health condition if they trust the treatment will be beneficial to their illness. For instance, if the customers know that the acupuncture has contributed to lots of previous successful cases in relieving pain, they already build up confidence and trust towards the treatment. They became less stressful and anxious. Even the treatment do not heal their illness, they generally feel good due to their psychological effects and the work of their immune system over time. On the other hand, people who opposed to Chinese medical tradition try traditional Chinese herbal medicine with scepticism may eventually recover from their diseases or at least see a noticeable body response towards the treatment on the diagnostic test such as MRI or CT scan if they follow the whole program due to the actual promising effectiveness of the treatment. In conclusion, I believe patient’s mental attitude towards the medical services can solely provide limited support or evidence in determining the effectiveness of the treatment.

Can someone help me to correct this article? Thanks :) Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.  Every child needs to be taught how to be a good person in a society. While some argue that they should learn this from school, I believe parent uphold a much more important role in guiding their children to be a good members of society. There is no doubt that school acts as a mini society in which we are trained to behave in certain ways in order to avoid punishment or receive positive reinforcement. We submit homework on time, listen to our teacher and do not use violence to solve problem because we do not want to get in trouble. School sets out a very clear and organized rules or systems for children to follow and learn how to behave. In addition, there are lots of vivid and true experiences from their classmates or friends that if they fail to obey some school rule, they would end up having very bad consequences. Therefore, children will be conditioned over time at school and have better idea to be self-disciplined. However, I also believe that parents play more significant roles in shaping their children to become a decent person at a higher standard. Parents have more time to be with their children than our schoolteachers. They can teach their children what other essential moral values they should uphold. For instance, they should contribute, and be kind and caring to others. They may also share and discuss past experience with their kids, so they understand the rationale behind holding those moral value. Guiding their children to deal with difficult situation is another way to teach their children what a good person should act like. In conclusion, parents have much more influence than school in shaping their kids to be a good member of society.

Snowden This movie is all about Edward Snowden, a former CIA and the most recent US whistleblower. The movie revealed lots of his private life with his girlfriend, Lindsay Mills, but more importantly, his work for the US government and how depressed he felt when his work betrayed his beliefs in openness and honesty.  From this movie, I gained a better insight about nowadays advanced technology. Individuals can be surveilled any time with their computer whether it is desk top or mobile device. The government is capable of using the built-in camera to take picture and video of them or hijacking their earphone to eavesdrop on the conversation. Even if the device is shut down, the authority can hijack and reawaken their phone. With the specialised computer used by the CIA, they can therefore access pretty much everything about an individual from the massive database or an instant track on them.  ​​ I really appreciated Edward Snowden's great and brave action and his accountability for others' lives. In order to inform the public of how they are governed in a way that everything about them is secretly recorded and watched, he decided to tell the truth to the media and sacrificed his stable life and bright future in the US. I also admired his integrity and that he advocated for what he believes to be right to do.

Did I make any mistake in describing the bar chart? Thanks! The bar chart compares the number of students from Singapore, Malaysia, China, Sri Lanka and France studied in third year Computer Science program at a Canadian college. It is cleared that the number of Chinese students made up the most in the third year Computer Science course. In general, more females enrolled this course than males except Sri Lanka. With the database option, students came from all five countries. The majority of students are males (21) compared to only 9 females students. Male students enrolled in database core option outnumbered female students in all of these countries except France with 3 females to 1 male. China had the most students studying in database of about 9 students, followed by Sri Lanka with 7 students and Singapore with 6 students. As for the networking option, there are more females than male enrolled from every nation except France. In fact, no female French chose this option. While there were 5 female students from Singapore, 6 from Malaysia and 7 from China, each country had only 1 male participated in this option, except Sri Lanka with 2 males. The bar chart shows the number of overseas students enrolled in a third year Computer Science course at a Canadian college. Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Can anyone help mark my IELTS writing paper? Thanksss Some people think that more money should be spent to promote the use of bicycles in cities. Others, however, believe that cities should focus on investing in public transport systems. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. In response to hectic issues related to climate change and traffic congestion, various alternatives such as the use of bicycles and the extension of the public transport systems have been drawn lots of attentions. Some argue that authorities should invest more in the facilitation of the bicycle use, I personally believe that the development of public transport systems is more practical and effective solutions to the social issues. There are a wide range of advantages in promoting the use of bicycle. When more individuals opt for bicycle to commute instead of energy-consuming vehicles, greenhouse gases emission may be significantly reduced and traffic congestion problem will be resolved. Encouraging people especially office workers or those who lives sedentary lifestyles to ride more bicycle also motivates the public to do more exercise and improve their health condition. If the demand for public transport reduces, this measure will may help taxpayers save up more than millions of dollars in the construction of public transport infrastructure. However, I strongly advocate that the development of transport system should be the priority in most cities. Mass transit fulfils everyone’s needs regardless of their physical condition such as handicraft, sick or for those who want to transport goods or luggage. It is also much safer than riding bicycle in the main road. With train, light rail, ferry, it saves us lots of traffic time and gives us more convenience. Individuals can travel as far as they want because of the astonishingly fast speed of the public transport. In addition, people may not response to the bicycle campaign as much as the improvement of the transportation even if the government put in lots of resource to make the change, which mean lots of effort, time and money may be wasted. In conclusion, I agree that the promotion of the bicycle use can contribute various benefits to our society, I strongly believe that policy maker should make a wise decision and put more money on the extension of the public transport system.