I'm grateful of your reading and correction. Would you like to drink coffee? ( see picture @-@) Crime is now a serious matter in our society because its level is increasing and more violent than in the past. I believe this is because of several reasons that should be considered seriously to find out effective solutions to improve the current situations. It is clear violent crimes are caused mainly by the young criminals. One of the reasons is that they lack both good education and the directions from their parents. Thus, they are not aware of criminal acts that lead them to be in jail because they commit a crime untentionally. Moreover, children's thinking is easily affected by violent scenes in films and games so that they suppose crimes are just games. Take action films as the examples, some children are addicted in these films and I think they can become heroes by murdering people. In my opinion, to reduce this kind of crimes, the society and individuals, especially parents should contribute to educating younger generations. In addtion, we also also prevent crimes happening by not allowing children to watch TV so much. In stead, children should be encouraged to participate in outdoor activities to learn the world around them. Another type of crimes is poverty crime that is often happening in developing countries. This crime is taken place by the poorer who lacks the basic conditions for living such as: food, clothes, etc. It is understandable. However, we can not tolerate for hurting people in any cases. I think we can combat poverty crimes by protecting our property carefully. Besides, the governments should make efforts to improve the conditions for the poorer people in our society. Last but not least, forcing new laws is also helpful in deterring offences I suppose. In short, to make our world better and safer, this requires the efforts of both our society and individuals by doing practical actions.

Please, just spend 5 mins to help me, dear, while you are waiting for a cup of coffee. Thank you @-@ Today It rained. and the weather was cool in Vietnam. I went to Highlands coffee shop and wrote this writing. Help me to correct for me and I appreciate your help. Hope to get a change to drink coffee with you here *-* You work in a busy but poorly organized office and you are keen to be promoted. Your employer needs to find a new supervisor for your department. Write a letter to your employer. In the letter • Ask to be considered for this job • Explain why you would be a suitable candidate • Outline the current problems and changes you would like to make Dear Mr. Smith, I really appreciate the time I’ve been working in our advertising company and I’ve learnt a lot of experience in running several important projects. As I know, our company is recruiting a supervisor because I was announced in the staff meeting this morning. Therefore, I’m writing this Email to apply for this position as I believe I’m a suitable candidate because of following reasons. Firstly, I’ve been working in the marketing area for 5 years from the time I graduated from my university and I have experience of marketing operations from the stage of design to the final stage of packaging. Particularly, I have good practical skills and succeeded in leading some advertising campaigns as a sub-leader. Secondly, I get on very well with my colleges and am good at managing real projects. There are some current problems that I want to mention in this Email and my suggestions to improve them because I want to make our projects done efficiently. The first thing is that our projects are too large to be finished on time because we lack the number of programmers. I suggest that we should open night shifts for employees who are willing to work overtime. This will result in not only the increase of our employee’s income but also the in-time projects so we will gain the credibility of our customers. Last but not least, I think, to encourage our employees to work productively, we should implement some rewarding policies such as: promotions, holidays and commissions, etc. Thanks for considering my Email. I’m looking forward to hearing from you. I hope my application will be accepted. Yours faithfully! Bao Vi

The academic writing: In today's job market @-@. Thanks for reading my writing. I'm studying myself for the exam so I need your help to improve my writing. I appreciate your help and I'm Vietnamese. If you travel or plan on travelling in my country, I just want to invite you for a cup of coffee as a BIG thank. In today's job market it is far more important to have practical skills than theoretical knowledge. In the future, job applicants may not need any formal qualifications. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Nowadays there is a strong competition between candidates who have just graduated to land a job in the job market. As the result, practical skills are considered more important than academic qualifications. People suppose that job candidates may not need any formal qualifications in the future due to this trend. In my opinion, I believe both qualifications and skills are significant for people to start to work. It cannot be denied that the business market are hungry for skilled employees for practical skills play an important role in the success of business. People can bring the contracts and benefits to companies if they're good at practical skills. Besides, there are students who study in a academic environment and lack skills that are necessary for their work in the future. With these students, companies have to train them with practical skills so that they can work efficiently but this process will take them a lot of time and money. Therefore, in stead of hiring in experienced employees, they will recruit people with high skills to shorten the time of training and this is understandable. For example, in the information technology industry, brands want to hire people with skills of coding and programming for projects more than ones who just have formal qualifications. However, in my point of view, we should not underestimate the importance of qualifications for they measure our understanding about a particular major we are involved in. Having a qualification means we have a foundation and ability to move forward in our career. Theory can be a contribution to help us improve in some professions such as: the medicine industry, the law, etc. In practice, we can make mistakes without mastering theory for we can't find out what problems are. It can be seen clearly that theoretical knowledge is also the vital part in doing actions. In short, I value both qualifications and practical skills in doing a successful job. They make up together for the benefits for job seekers.

#2 Rewrite an Essay of IELTS Writing. Please help me to correct it. Thanks for your time <3 Thanks to the medical revolution along with the higher standard of living, average life expectancy is now increasing compared to in the past. However, this trend also results in some problems for individuals and society. To begin with, it is the fact that the rising of the number of old people has a direct impact on the economy. When the old retire, we lost a lot of skillful and potential employees, who were trained and had much working experience. As the result, firms, factories and companies lack the human resources to fill the positions for it requires a certain period to recruit new members for staff and train according to the demands of work. Another disadvantage of this trend is that governments may have pressure to take care their old citizens. They may have to spend thousands of dollars on medicine and treatments for senior people annually. Besides the affects to society, rising average life expectancy also brings about problems for individuals. We cannot deny the fact that pace of life is now fairly fast and people appear to busier with their works. Women go to work and want to get promotion in their careers instead of stop to give birth. This is not only the reason but also the result of aging populations. Young generations continue to work and do not get home until late in the evening while the old feel solidity in their homes. As regards some solutions to these problems, it is generally believed that it requires the cooperation of society and individuals. The governments can create job opportunities for the old citizens, such as gardeners and gate keepers, etc. Towards medical system, health care administrators can appeal to the volunteers who support money or hard work for hospitals or health care centers. This practice allows people to have a close connection in the society, especially old people. More importantly, governments should help the old citizens to be aware of the importance of keeping healthy such as doing exercises and having a nutritious diet through heath programs to lower the expenses for medicine and treatments. Above all, to change the trend of aging populations, governments should encourage women to give birth to make the population younger. In conclusion, obviously this trend is definitely a good development for it has proved that our life is better, both physically and mentally. Although this causes some problems as mentioned above, these drawbacks could be controlled and this job requires the efforts in the long run.

#2 Essay of IELTS Writing. Please help me to correct it. Thanks for your time <3 TOPIC: In the developed world, average life expectancy is increasing. What problems will this cause for individuals and society? Support some measures that could be taken to reduce the impact of ageing populations. The issue of the rising of average life expectancy is debated widely. It is generally believed that ageing populations result in problems for individuals and society. This essay will examine some matters and propose measures to improve the situation. To begin with, we cannot deny that rising average life expectancy has a directly impact on economy. The lacks of job is a serious problem which arise from the increase of the old people. Moreover, almost companies want to hire young and skillful employees who would be able to adapt to the work characteristics. It seems hard for the elderly to meet the command of the environmental work. This problem, however, could be reduced by the attempts of both individuals and governments. People should continue to study subjects, which they have desires. Although the improvement may be slower than that of the younger people, but senior citizens feel they are useful for society. Governments can help people to find appropriate works. For example, a 50-year-old- lady with the strong passion reading can become a skillful librarian. In addition to above problem, health care system is also considered as a serious one. Governments have to spend a lot of money on medicines and treatments for the senior citizens. Every year, it takes thousands of dollars on medical equipment and medicines. Governments have heavy pressure on taking care of the elderly. As regards some solutions to this problem, it is generally believed that the cooperation of individuals and society is vitally important. Health Care System administrators should appeal to the volunteers who support money had hard work in hospitals or health care centers. Besides that, calling upon the helps of students is also a good idea. More importantly, governments should help the old people to be fully aware of the importance of keeping healthy, such as doing exercises, having a nutritious diet. In conclusion, thanks to the medical development average life expectancy is rising. Even though this cause some problems as mentioned above, but these drawbacks could be controlled and this job requires the efforts of individuals and society in a long turn. Please suggest me by supporting me with some more phases I should use in this essay. I appreciate your helps!!! <3

An essay of IELTS Writing. Please, help me to correct it or guide me how to write in better way!!! Today, some companies employ the equal number men and women to work. Is it a positive or negative development? The issue of whether employing the equal number of men and women workers by some companies has been debated widely. Some people think that this has a lot of drawbacks. Others believe that this is an extremely good development. The following essay will consider whether this trend is positive or negative. To begin with, it is generally agreed that this trend is rather good since it shows that women have got equal treatment. It is remarkable revolution in eliminating the discrimination between two genders which did not happen in the past. Women, nowadays, are free to dedicate their talents, knowledge for the society and the development of the economy. In some cases, the chances of success of women are highly higher than those of men. Taking communication for instance, women are often better than men at persuading customers to sign contracts, bringing more benefits to their companies. However, this trend is not totally free from drawbacks. Hiring the equal number of men and women sometimes does not meet the requirements of some companies. For example, fewer women are found in some kinds of firms, such as in steel factories, automobile industry whereas a lot of women are working in many textile companies. Moreover, firms face the dilemma of paying salaries for women while they are off, giving a birth to a baby or hiring men workers. In conclusion, if companies would employ the equal number of both genders, they would benefit mutually. Besides of above benefits, there may have some trades off because of the characteristic of the works. However, these disadvantages would be reduced by the talents of CEOs in running companies, such as: assigning workers to appropriate positions, both men and women, hiring temporary employees while there potential ones are off. If possible, Please do me a favor by supporting me more phrases used in writing this topic !!! I appreciate this so much <3 <3 <3

Help me to correct my Writing 1 For IELTS. I really appreciate !!! The graph compares the number of farms and workers in USA during the period 1910-2000. Overall, the figures for both factors show a downward trend during the time given. In the first twenty years, while the number of farms started at 6,5 millions in 1910 and remained stable in the following years, the number of people working on farm decreased slightly from 13,5 millions to 12,4 millions. In the next five years, there was a minimal rise in both figures, 6,8 millions and 12,5 millions respectively. Between 1935 and 1970, the number of farms and workers experienced a dramatic decline in which farm numbers were only 3 million whereas worker numbers were 4,5 millions. However, from 1945 to 1950, the figure of workers hovered around 10 millions. For the rest of the period, both figures continued to fall at the similar steady rate, ending the period at 2 millions of farms as opposed to 3 millions of workers. To sum up, we can see clearly that although there is a downward trend in the number of farms and workers the figures of workers were consistently higher than these of farms.