Could you correct my English? Hi. I am studying English for TOEFL ibt. I am glad if you correct my English;) Thank you! It is better to enjoy your money when you earn it or is it better to save your money for some time in the future? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. I think that it is better to save my money for some time in the future. I have two reasons to support this. First, I need money for treatment of my body. Now I am good body because I am young and have a strong body. But in the future, I don’t know whether I will still be heathy or not. For instance, some diseases are inherited form age to age. My grandfather died due to cancer so I can have a cancer in the future because this disease is inherited form age to age. Unfortunately my uncle was dead because of the same cancer. I know how money I need for treatment of cancer. It is difficult to make money as soon as possible. To prepare for sickness, I need to save money. Second, I may find big dream in the future. Of course, I have some dream to realize now. For example, I want to travel all over the world. Because the airplane tickets are very expensive, I have to earn money by working at the cram school. However, there is a possibility that I would find new dream which need a lot of money. Then if I don’t have enough money to make it, I will enforce to give it up. I don’t want to do like that because I want to try to do something which I am interested in forever. That is why I want to save money for the future.

Could you correct my English? I am studying TOEFL ibt. I am glad if you correct my English. It is more important to keep your old frinends than making new friends. I think it is more important to make new friends First, it gives us good mental affection. Some people don't like to make friends because they are shy or nervous when they meet strang people. It is a natural thing and I also feel like that at first. But one day I realize that making new friends may have some positive point so I shouldn't avoid chances to meet new people. One of my friends, who was not my friend 2 years ago, is very active and take action which she is interested in as soon as possible, I envy her because I am worried about many things when I start something new. However her action make me more active. I become more positive person. Her passion chenge my mind better. I appreciate the day when we become friends. Second, it may lead to increase salary in the future. For example when you move to or join the new company, you have to introducce yourself in the front of everyone who you don't know. At the lunch time you don't know any friends who heva lunch with. Then if you try to make new friends and good relationships, you have an oppotunity to talk to senior guys.They hava lights to judge your performamce and decide your money. Because you and your boss are good friends, you may get more money. That is why what is important thing is making new friends.

Could you correct my English? Young people enjoy life more than older people. I agree with this idea that young people enjoy life more than older people do. First, young people have strong bodies. The older people get, the weaker their bodies are. So older people are not able to do some of experiences which need physical fittness. For instance, long flight needs healthy bodies. To travel from Tokyo to Los Angels, it takes over twelve hours. If people are sick or use some medical equipments, it is hard to spend time in plane for a long hours. Also they must find a local hospitals which correspond to their diseases in other countries when something happens to them. Usually young people are fine so that they can try to do most of things which they are interested in. Second, young people have a lot of chances. There are a lot of programs to support young people. Some of programs are free or cheaper for young peopler. For example, most young people don't have money, so most of them, especially students, have a part time job to earn money for their dreams or hobbies. Even though they try to get amount of money, money is not enough to realize their dreams. Some companies have programs to cheer that kind of young people up. One of the programs I know is a Tobitate program. It is a schorship for people under 30 years old. On this program companies which are interested in young people's dream pay money for them. One of my friends really wanted to go abroad to help people in asian countries. She applied to this program and passed it. Now she is working to change the poor conditon in asian countries. That is why I think young people can be sartisfied with thier life.

Could you correct my English? I am studying English for TOEFL ibt. I would like to find someone who corrects my English. 10.　“When people succeed, it is because of hard work. Luck has nothing to do with success.” Do you agree or disagree with the quotation above? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your opinion. I disagree with the quotation. Of course, hard work is important to success in life. I know many people who success in many fields, and all of them make effort. For example, Ichiro, who is a famous baseball player, said in an interview “I always do my best to be a better baseball player. I have my routine and have done it forever.” Because of his hard work, he became a star of people all over the world. His effort led him to his success. But I feel that luck is also important to success. When I was a freshman of university, I really wanted to start something new. I like beautiful ocean, so I decided to be a member of windsurfing team. I had never played it before. At first, I didn’t like it because I was worse among other members. I didn’t like giving it up so I went to the beach and practiced it for three years. I put in work in order to win a race in the future. Finally I won the lace in the last month which I could play windsurfing in. My rival made a mistake at the beginning of the race. Then I was supposed that I could win because the rival who always won the laces made a mistake. If her mistake didn’t happen, I wouldn’t win the lace. I felt that I had luck. We don’t know when miracle will happen. However luck can change a result which we are sure. Even though we have a kind of talent and make effort to improve the situation, we may not get good chances to make the most of our ability because of lack of luck. That is why I think luck is also needed to success in addition to hard work.

Could you correct my English I am studying English for TOEFL ibt. I would like to find someone who correct s my English. Questions Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a long time. Which of these situations do you think is better? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. Answer In my opinion, I prefer to live alone. I have some reasons. First, I can learn how important money is. When we live with parents at home, most of parents pay money for housing, water and gas. Parents pay them to work hard every day. Children don’t care about it because they think it is natural that parents pay them. But they get to know about money when they live alone because there are no people who pays for them. Then they cherish money, water, gas and so on. In my case, I have had a part time job and earned money to pay for my apartment fee since I lived alone. Second, I can get a lot of skills which I can’t get at parents’ home. For example, I was not good at cooking before I lived by myself, but I decided to move to another prefecture to go to university so that I started to live at the apartment by myself. I didn’t have anyone who help me at the new place. It was a hard time for me to suit for new life. However I am able to do laundry, cooking, driving and so on. I am sure that people can do most of things when they face the situation that they must solve by themselves. Third, I have a responsibility for everything I do. Children tend to depend on their parents during stay at parent’s home. Although existence of parents is important and essential for them, sometimes it bothers growth of their children. So it is a good time for both parents and their children to cheer the growth up and be ready for future life. That is why I think that I want independence from my parents if I have a chance to do it.

11 Jan. 2018 I finished a test! I'm tired. I have to study TOEFL hard because I want to go abroad. it seems to be difficult to do it, but I will do it !!!

5 Jan, 2018 Happy new year! I know it`s late, but I hope this year will be the good year for you. I could do and see my parents in my hometwn. And I I went snowboarding.It was fun. This year I will do what I want to do. It won't be easy, but I'll try!

20 Dec, 2017 My classes started at 8:30 and finished at 15:00. At lunch time my friends and I went to the cafe which is close to my university. That food was nice! After classes I went to the shopping mall to buy a Christmas present for one of my friends. I'm planning to change it each other. I did a part-time job and came back home. I will stay hotel with my friends tomorrow;)

19 Dec, 2017 I had two tests today. I studied hard, but it was a little difficult. The result will be told me day after tomorrow. I'm very nurvous. A good thing for me was that I had no test in the rest of 2017!! I can enjoy everything without thinking tests!!! But I will have to start to study for them soon becouse I will have to take them in January, 2018. By the way I went to restaurant for dinner. I ate steak, and it was good. Now I'm full. I am going to go out with my friends tomorrow. I'm looking forward to it!