もっと運動する よろしくおねがいします。私の文章を添削してください。私の目標は文法的な文章を書いて正確な意味合いを使いたいです。私はたくさん言葉がまだ習わなかったから時々辞書で引いています。手伝って頂けると有難いです。 I'm still learning the kanji to apply to my existing vocabulary, so my writing is a mix of basic kanji and hiragana. If I don't know a word that I need, I try to find it in a dictionary, but that means I might not use it correctly or there might be a more accurate word for my meaning. My goals are to be grammatically accurate and to use words with the right nuance of meaning for the context. 今日の文章: かつては毎日家の犬と一緒に二回の散歩しました。今はあまり運動をしません。もっと運動するべきです。しかし夏に昼間がとても暑い。明け方に涼しいですが私が遅く起きます。早めに私が起きて足早に散歩するべきです。 Today's text: In the past, I walked my dog twice every day. Now, I don't exercise much. I should exercise more. However, it's very hot during the day in the summer. It is cool at dawn, but I get up late. I should get up earlier than usual and go for a brisk walk. Notes: "かつては", "今は" ― Should I have used "に" instead of "は"? Or is "は" all right since I am changing the topic from the past to the present in order to compare them? "もっとうんどうするべきです" ― I found "べき" in the dictionary when trying to find the right way to convey "should, ought to." The phrase I learned would use "もっとうんどうしたほうがいいです", but that seems like it's for recommending something to someone else, or for "I would like to" rather than "I ought to." I also saw "なければなりません" in the dictionary, but I didn't know how to use that phrase. "早めに" ― I know "早く" for "early," but I wasn't sure how to convey the concept "earlier than usual." I found "早くから" and "早めに" in the dictionary, and after studying the example sentences I went with "早めに." Did I make the right choice? Is there a better word? 時間をとっていただいてありがとうございます。Thank you for taking the time to help me.

加齢 (Becoming Older) よろしくおねがいします。私の文章を添削してください。私の目的は文法的な文章を書きて正確な意味合いを使いたいです。時々に言葉を知りませんので辞書で引きます。てつだってくれるとありがたいです。 I'm still learning the kanji to apply to my existing vocabulary, so my writing is a mix of basic kanji and hiragana. If I don't know a word that I need, I try to find it in a dictionary, but that means I might not use it correctly or there might be a more accurate word for my meaning. My goals are to be grammatically accurate and to use words with the right nuance of meaning for the context. 今日の文章: 今月に私のたんじょう日がです。毎年、時間がだんだん早く進みます。私はまだ本当に古いではありません、けど時々古い感じます。しかしごとく大人を感じません。今十代の人が小さい子どもに見える、でも大人がまだ大人。私が間をしています。時間が変なね。 Today's text: My birthday is this month. Every year, time seems to pass by faster and faster. I'm not old yet, but sometimes I feel old. However, I don't feel like an adult. Teenagers now look like small children, but adults are still adults. I'm somewhere in between. Time is strange, isn't it. Notes: "進みます" — I know that this is used for walking along a path or progressing towards a destination. Is it used abstractly for time too? "古い" — This seems to have the connotation of "antique," and I found a dictionary note that says it applies only to things, not to people. I could not find a good adjective to mean "old" for people. What should I use? "感じます" — I found this in the dictionary, but I'm not sure it's the right word for this context. "十代の人" — This was the best I could do to convey "teenager." Should I have used "ティーンエイジャー" instead? "けど", "でも" — Did I distinguish between these two properly, or is my usage unnatural? 時間をとっていただいてありがとうございます。Thank you for taking the time to help me.

弟と一緒にハガレン よろしくおねがいします。私の文章を正してください。私は正しい言葉を使うっているのがしたいです。てつだってくれておねがいします。 I'm still learning the kanji to apply to my existing vocabulary, so my writing is a mix of basic kanji and hiragana. If I don't know a word that I need, I try to find it in a dictionary, but that means I might not use it correctly or there might be a more accurate word for my meaning. My goals are to be grammatically accurate and to use words with the right nuance of meaning for the context. 今日の文章: 今回は弟が「鋼の錬金術師」を観ています。私は弟にそれがいい話でとても面白いで楽しいもと言いました。弟が観て後、彼と一緒にいつもたくさん話します、時々二時間。彼の一番好きの人たちがホークアイやマスタングをです。うれしいなぜなら私もホークアイやマスタングを好きです。でも私は一番好きの人をきめるのが難しいです。オリヴィエ•アームストロングもとてもいいです。イズミもアルもランファンもリンヤオもグリードも… しかしはじめられる、止めるありません。みんなを好きがいいませんか？ 荒川先生がとても上手作家です。 Today's text: Recently, my younger brother has been watching Fullmetal Alchemist. I told my younger brother that it is a good story, very interesting and enjoyable. After my brother watches a few episodes, we always talk a lot, sometimes for two hours. His favorite characters are Hawkeye and Mustang. That pleases me, because I also like Hawkeye and Mustang. But it's difficult for me to decide who I like the most. Olivier Armstrong is very good too. And Izumi, and Al, and Lan Fan, and Ling Yao, and Greed… If I get started, I won't be able to stop. (Once I get started, there's just no stopping.) Can't I like everyone? Arakawa-sensei is a very skilled writer. Notes: I'm still struggling to get the syntax right for complex sentences. I'm pretty sure my second, third, and ninth sentences are terrible, and I'm not sure the tenth sentence says what I mean. My skill level is a bit low for making complex sentences, but I'm eager to reach that degree of fluency, so I'm stretching myself by practicing them anyway. I would greatly appreciate any tips you have for improving my syntax. おねがいします！ There are certain parts of my text that I know are trouble spots or that I have questions about. There isn't enough room here to mention them, so I've added them in a comment below. I'd be very grateful if you would take a look at those too. 時間をあげましたのでありがとうございます。Thank you for taking the time to help me.

私の秋田犬 よろしくおねがいします。ケイシアです。私の文章を正してください。私は正しい言葉を使っているのがしたいです。てつだってくれておねがいします。 I'm still learning the kanji to apply to my existing vocabulary, so my writing is a mix of basic kanji and hiragana. My goals are to be grammatically accurate and to use words with the right nuance of meaning for the context. 今日の文章: 家のペットは秋田犬でした。家の秋田犬の名前はイェシでした。時々友達たちが「ヨシ」と言った。ちがう！私の愛犬は緑色のダイノソーではありません。イェシはたくさん毛があります。イェシの毛は毎年に二、三回ぬけました。今年の六月にイェシが亡くなりました。彼女は十一才でした。イェシの生が長かっでいいかった。 Today's text: My family's pet was an Akita. Our Akita's name was Yeshi. Sometimes our friends called her "Yoshi." That's not right! My beloved dog is not a green dinosaur. Yeshi had a lot of fur. Her fur fell out two or three times each year. This June, Yeshi passed away. She was eleven years old. Yeshi's life was long and good. Notes: "家のペットは秋田犬でした" — Would it be correct to phrase this "うちは秋田犬を飼った" to mean "We had an Akita"? I found "飼う" while searching the dictionary, and I wondered if that verb included the concept "pet" so that I would not have to state "ペット" explicitly in the sentence. "イェシ" — We named our dog "Yeshulum," from the Hebrew word for "promise fulfilled," but we called her "Yeshi" for short. It sounds a little like Japanese, but it isn't actually. "ぬけました" — Akitas have a thick undercoat and a wiry topcoat, and Yeshi blew coat (shed her thick fur) twice a year, sometimes three times if the weather was very warm. I came across "ぬける" in a contextual sentence for "毛" in my vocabulary practice, and I looked it up in a dictionary to verify it, but I haven't learned it properly yet. Perhaps there is a more accurate verb for this meaning? "毎年に二、三回" — I had trouble figuring out how to say "this or that" for time periods. Does this work, or is there a better way to convey "two or three times each year"? "彼女" ― Our dog was female, and the only female pronoun I've learned is "彼女." Is it used for animals as well as for people? "長かっでいいかった" — I'm not sure I joined the adjectives properly. I know to use "と" and "や" with nouns, but adjectives are different, and I haven't formally learned those rules yet. ありがとうございます。 Thank you for your time!

エアコンがありません よろしくおねがいします。ケイシアです。私の文章を正しますください。 I'm still learning the kanji to apply to my existing vocabulary, so my writing is a mix of basic kanji and hiragana. I'm interested in grammatical accuracy and contextual nuance. (辞書を引いています… "正しい言葉を使う"と思います?) 今日の文章: 大変です! 今日は家のエアコンをしにました。今はすずしいシャワーがいいです。今週末はベースメントにねます。 Today's text: I have a problem! Today, the air conditioner in my house died. A cool shower would be good right now. This weekend I will sleep in the basement. Notes: For mentioning the problem, I wasn't sure whether "大変です" or "困っています" would be more accurate. I know "大変" has connotations of "rough," "tough," "hard," so I went with that, since being without AC in the summer is pretty rough. "困り" seems more like "troubled," but I don't have as much context for it. "家の" — I think I've seen this used as both "our" and "of the house," so I figured it was suitable. "My family's air conditioner" and "the air conditioning in my house" are interchangeable for what I mean. I know that "our" is "私たちの". Should I have used that instead? "エアコン" — I've heard this used in anime. Is it the most common word used for "air conditioning" in Japan, or is there a native Japanese word that I should use instead? Died: quit working. I'm not sure what the right word is in Japanese, so I used "しにました". At this point, I only know that and "なくなりました", which I think means something more along the lines of "left" or "lost" or "passed away." Is there a word specifically for objects or appliances that don't have a literal life? I don't know the word for "basement," so I used katakana. Is there a Japanese word for a finished room underneath the house? Not a cellar or a foundation, but a livable room. ありがとうございます。 Thank you for your time!